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justthisonce

  • Poetry » Fantasy, Spiritual Re: You Reap What You Sow.

    I really like this. It was good. I liked the resolution of the poem in particular. I think the "I feel no regret,/for to feel is to die" lines needed ...

    Jul 18, 2013
  • Short Story » General, Narrative Re: Timba and James

    Woah, okay. What I really appreciate about this piece is it's ability to transport the reader. I feel all the things Timba feels as I read them. My curiosity grows ...

    Jul 16, 2013
  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, Dramatic Re: Ruined World

    I really like the range of emotions explicated in this piece. It's really entertaining. I would have liked a bit more internal expression, as a lot of vocal and psychical ...

    Jul 16, 2013
  • Poetry » Literature, Other Re: Life

    I love the stream of consciousness vibe I am picking up from this poem. The structure is very loose, and the topic is intriguing. I think the content, although complex ...

    Jul 16, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Lost

    I like the theme and idea communicated here. It just seems very obvious and a little cliche. The rhythm in some areas is awkward. The pacing of the second and ...

    Jul 16, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: we are not/we are

    This was an excellently worded poem. It seemed so carefully written and thoughtful. It causes the reader to question and re-read and relate. I found myself saying, that's odd- we ...

    Jul 16, 2013
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Writer's Depression

    I really love your description in this piece. I think it captures/communicates what your trying to convey really nicely. This is what writers block feels like for me, essentially. The ...

    Jul 16, 2013
  • Poetry » General, Narrative Re: blur

    Hey, I'm new! I write poetry but very sparingly. I agree with Blackwood, the orientation of the stanzas is uncomfortable. I also think the last stanza uses 'me' too often. ...

    Jul 16, 2013


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