jumpingsheep

jumpingsheep here again! On a completely coincidental note, your paragraphs were broken really well in this chapter! Nice! This story so far reminds me of a dream sequence, where the ...

jumpingsheep here!! I just found the last chapter of your story in the feed, but I thought I should really start from the beginning of your book before reading the ...

I just read your first two chapters! I love your command of details and description. You also have a really nice combination of moods, a little bit of mystery, but ...

Nice work! I like the world that you have set up here, and I find your narrator to be even more intriguing. I can't wait to find out more about ...

I'm back! Just like in the last chapter, there was some wonderful characterization that you did here. The narrator's backstory about being bullied was very well written and it added ...

Hi, jumping sheep here! Happy review day! First off, I really liked the characterization you have going on in this chapter, right off the bat. As a reader, I really ...

Yay another chapter! I liked how you really starting to characterize Tish and Louisa's friendship based on their letters and how they react to getting one, and how they write ...

Jumping sheep here to (finally!) read and review this next chapter. I had computer problems, so I was offline all last week :/ I thought that Tish's voice was particularly ...

I too thought that was a great quote to start with! I had to read it several times to really absorb it and it was worth the extra few reads. ...

Ok, so I just read chapters 1-3 and I am super pumped to see what happens next!!! I have some suspicions-- but I'm not going to spoil anything for anyone ...

I enjoyed the concept for this story! I agree with Red that you could add some more descriptive details to really bring this story to life! The time breaks seem ...

Woohoo another chapter! I think this story is getting better and better with each new addition. I know you said that you weren't sure if you liked this chapter, but ...

This chapter started a little slow, but it definitely grew more interesting as the narrator starting talking about Bow-Bow and Mr. Droves. I feel like that poem Mr. Droves wrote ...

I really liked the dialogue in this chapter! You managed to really capture the spirit of the world you're creating. The characters seemed real and their plight when the factory ...

I too really liked how this wasn't a letter back to Louisa, but rather Tish's response to receiving it. I thought that this helped to separate Louisa and Tish as ...