july4ruby

Hey! I really like the idea and I know that most of us feel the same way but the truth is the critics are just trying to help you.Now the ...

Hi I liked the imagery but the sentences feel incomplete. You see the reader can't exactly get the idea what your trying to convey.try using clearer sentences and join the ...

Hi! Wow, this is ....... AMAZING. The depth,the emotions,the feelings,It says a lot about your writing.I don't know about criticism but this is the type of stories that make you ...

Hi! This is a great poem and I like that you are experimenting with various writing styles.It's a really short poem but it conveys a lot of emotion and feel ...

hi good idea..i guess.. anyways the first one was ok I guess.The second one nice rhyming,except I am trying to rack my brain for the meaning of Apocalypse The third ...

hi, I like the poem,It's really good but still I found it a little confusing too.and why did you use the phrase "her steady breathing" so much was it part ...

hi Dreamy! Really awesome poem.I don't think I can find anything wrong with it.I loved the rhyming and love the flow of the poem.I felt something while I was reading ...

hi litehawk! I really loved the poem! I think June and peanut have pointed out all the mistakes so there isn't much left for me to say.Anyways I am not ...

hey! I think it was great.but this line bugged me"Creatures that thrive in a six year old's mind"I know it goes with the poems central idea but the problem is ...

hi! I guess I am not good at reviewing but I'll still try.I liked the topic.I agree with nox that you should change the title.The word were a little hard ...

Hi! I really liked the poem :)The subject is great.there are a few little mistakes(if you don't mind).I felt that 'thee' was a little odd.secondly the rhyming scheme was a ...

I liked your poem very much.I feel I can relate to what you wrote.I can't judge you the way others do because I have just started writing poetry myself and ...