jimdandy

Wow. Touching, I love it. You've done a great job on this story. Even though the end did end abruptly, I can see ahead of where Larry and John's conversation ...

You're right about this whole thing. Seventeen is rounding up for me in February and I haven't been doing much dreaming. You inspire me to dream seven-fold. I want to ...

Wow. You know, I've never really pondered the thought of imagining a whole forum as a space station. I have nearly always kept my ideals small. This brings my imagination ...

Oh-so grand in the most simplistic manner! The similies and metaphors are extrordinary! Espescially at the line, "My allusions of delusions were boons..." Exquisite in my mind, to picture all ...

I think I understand it but I won't say and start a debate. I think it well done although the wording could have a wee bit more structure. I do ...

Wonderful, reminds me of the stuff I write still to all the women I meet. Only a few errors on lacing some of you King James' speech. "... can |thy| ...

A grand point of the cycle of life and death. Would be cool if you worded it to continue at the beginning, but all in all this is wonderful.

Interesting, very interesting. I like the way Ivy flashed back because it does happen to people who have been hit with a traumatizing event, and especially how it was placed ...

For a paragraph, it makes a good start to an action chapter, other than a few grammatical and very few spelling errors. Good, but it could be better. Try expanding ...