jcp92292

First off, what an idea (: Loved the concept of the whole guy becomes superstar type story going on. I liked the alot of it, but I felt maybe you ...

Having in mind this was your very first attempt, I'd say you're off to a good start. One of the things I liked is that you understand the concept of ...

Well the positive for sure is you made me laugh... as was the purpose of this whole song. Creative, absolutely, and well written at that. Work on the flow a ...

First of all, I have to say it was short, concise, and very well put to the point. Now this being a script and all, I would suggest you add ...

Oh my, now I feel quite saddened... nice nice work (: I'm really not sure if there is anything you could of done better to be honest, Well written; perhaps ...

Is this a first attempt? Well either ways not bad man (: you make this fellow male writer proud. It flowed pretty well.. a couple of notes though... first is ...

I'll be honest about my critique.., by far you have to be best writer in lyrics I've seen on this site, do work (: I believe your song captures the ...

=D Oh my goodness, you completely caught me off guard there! Man, I was bout to say very heartfelt, but wow. First off, I like the sense of humor, and ...

Very, very impressive, and you told me your writing hasn't gotten any better. Your lying sure has. The poem is not the greatest in the world, I'll admit. To say ...

hahahahahahahahhahahahaha!! Wow, let me start of by saying I did not understand a single word of your song. Yet in ways I find this very appealing. (: First off is ...