jasmine12

Hey Ash. I've got a question for you. Why can't Sophia and Carmen be together? If she's so gah-gah over him, and before, he said he was all gah-gah as ...

one any only nitpick In the last paragraph, you said "bite ME lip" when is should be my. Ash! Oh my god. this chapter was amazingly written. Kinda short for ...

Hey, Jas here. No time for chit chat. On to the review... which would account for the shiver I had felt. I dont feel that this bit is really needed. ...

So, as many before me have stated, it is rather info dumpy. We don't need so much backround story just yet. Just go right into the action. Wait until she ...

So, everyone before me has basically said what I would like to say. The horrific actions that the narrator must go through to feel as if revenge is the right ...

Hmm. I think this is very interesting. happened to me six months ago. Anyways. I think you did an amazing job at capturing the right emotions and descriptions needed. I ...

Hello. So I see you are rather new. My name is Jas and I will be your reviewer today. Some things I say may seem harsh but it is in ...

Alright, Ash. Here as promised...and yes, if you were wondering, the room IS clean for once. Okay, enough about me...lets move on to this chapter. I was thinking of ways ...

I pulled myself up and leaned into towards the thing on the ground beside me. This sentence doesn't make much sence here. Maybe some rewording? I wasn’t too sure where ...

OOOOOOOKAY. So, that was good. Very discriptive. I would like to hear more about the 'partner coven' i think some more of a backstory would be needed there. dont you ...

Okay then. Hmm. I liked the dream. It was very mysterious and would stick with me as well. But you connected the dream to Michael bringing up the human incounter ...

Cliffhanger much???? So im guessing that this painfull cry shes hearing in the woods is whatever Isaac is? More than likely a shap shifter. very nice. I cant wait to ...

Pointed? Teeth? but. he. was. human. plot twist alert! plot twist alert! hahaha. awesome. More conflict, i assume? I just have to read on, I just have to. and i ...

Is it just me, or are your chapters becomeing shorter and shorter? One part, when Sophia is talking to Cassandra, you say yes, cassandra...but i think you meant Elena. One ...

Okay, yes this was just fluff, but you could have added a bit more. Not having her pass out right away, or having there been something else before she goes ...