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PMed the rest of you, thanks for reviews. :) Really cool, though you are missing a period at the end of the second stanza-it's something new that I've never seen, ...

Thanks everyone for the generous reviews! In response to Rob, the China part was just a reference to how everything we consume tends to be manufactured in China anyway, especially ...

Thanks Pandora! It was attempt to, as Jennya sensed, describe death and consumerism in the context of one another. To use a consumed product as a metaphor for a dead ...

Thanks for the crits everyone! Butter there is kind of an allusion to writer's block that I kind of intended. It was more the mood of having it than actually ...

Thanks for the review, you've inspired me to rework this poem. :)

Your review bears the sign of a marvelous critique! (I agree with you. :p) I'm gonna make this poem read like sweet sex, just for you. Rating coming up.

Thanks for the crit! But you are wrong about "gossamer" as I used to be. It actually can take the form of an adjective. There were parts where I was ...

@Lavender Thanks for the thorough review. I will argue with you though, however, as a an avid consumer of tea that Earl Grey can be used in reference to black ...

Thank you for the generous reviews! Of course you can do whatever the hell you want with my poem. :P

And Plan B: I suffocate from voices . S plash ing the restful, struggling to glimpse the surface, I breathe fresh air. I'm personally a fan of Plan B. The ...

Thanks for the feedback! @Calligraphy: In that stanza I was comparing memories to flowers floating on water and kind of bobbing and swaying around, as if they are remembered and ...

Capitalize seasons, make "life less" "lifeless". Overall a sweet poem, the ending was nice.

I'll consider reading when the title is changed to "Andrew and I".

Thanks everyone! I EXTREMELY appreciate the constructive criticism and generous praise. :) I will do my best to improve.

Thanks for all the comments/crits! I agree with some stuff and not with others. Probabaly won't change the poem though. The days weren't meant to be a 100% rigid paralel ...