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Hey, sorry that this isn't much of a review. I loved this! I was at the edge of my seat muttering, "Don't go with him! Don't go with him!" xD ...

Hey there! Welcome to YWS! I liked this piece! It flowed well for me. I would just try and break it into stanzas. That makes it a little easier to ...

Poem here to review! This was rather choppy, you could try to blend some of the sentences together more. Or have the sentences vary in length a bit more. Also ...

I really likes the poem until here: in the first sweet sleepy moments of the morning when you're wakened by the sun's caress and aware of everything and nothing or ...

To say something for Rocky here, the project was to describe a postcard without a plot. :P Anyway, I like how you had it in second person. It's unusual, but ...

To me, it seemed that you were trying to get through the story as quick as possible. It would make no sense that a five year old would know to ...

Poem here to review ^^ Lets see, this poem is good, but not that original. I don't really see why you have the "..." at the end of every line. ...

This was awesome! I thought about WWII before the last stanza too! You have great description here, but not too much. That's great, and it was easy to understand. I ...

This is a good abstract idea, but you are just telling me everything, and not showing me. Like right here in the beginning: The lioness is my guardian I am ...

This poem was great June! I had to read it a few times to understand it completely though. Great word choice, but be careful on how many descriptive words that ...

The poem was great, I liked how you couldn't see the end. Young, I think the poem about the basket ball is by Anti-Pop. Here is the whole poem showing ...

This was great, but it was a little hard for me to tell whose POV it was. I didn't really get that it was Ashleigh until she started talking, and ...

Poem at your service! Lets see here.... Overall It was good, but you seemed to be telling me rather than showing me. Example: Instead of saying "The sun is out, ...

Great poem! I just have a few things to say. :arrow: But then come this thought: Comes would work better...I think. :arrow: Though we all know about it, To me ...

I really loved this poem! I couldn't find that much wrong with it. Although, there are some I's that need to be capitalized. Other than that I cannot find anything. ...