icebender28

Wow, violent. I really liked it! It was kind of confusing at first, but i like how you wrote from the point of veiw that you did. It was an ...

Wow, violent. I really liked it! It was kind of confusing at first, but i like how you wrote from the point of veiw that you did. It was an ...

Great job! I liked the symbolism in it, and the feel you gave to it. I didn't really like the flow of the words. It seemed choppy to me, but ...

Thank you for all of your comments! They really helped me! I did make this for a contest, BTW, and, in light of all your comments, I will make it ...

i think it's a great idea, writing from the point of veiw of the flyer. very enchanting, and nice description, I just thought you repeated things to many times and ...

It is so cute! I loved how you made the reader understand what was happening, without saying it outright, so that it seemed more from the child's point of veiw. ...

I thought you did great! Great job personafication-izing the sun. I tdid get a little confusing near the end, but i still thought it was cute, and very rythmetic.

I loved it! It was so cute how you kind of wrote it from Gump a Goo's point of veiw. I think it was really adorable!

I thought you did great! The first couple of paragraphs were okay, but then you worked on characterizing them and the last few bits got me hooked for more. Please ...

I really liked it. And it's true too! People used to say sorry and really mean it, but now they just say it. you did a good job of putting ...

I loved it! very descriptive, and you really made me feel for the witch. At the end, it became very gruesome, though. It was cool, but gruesome. Keep writing! I ...

umm... okay... It was hilarious! Al little weird, but hilarious. ...

Steven, Grey, and Callie are best friends and major leaders in the rebellion gainst the Krag. But, when Grey dies, Callie gets a bug inside of her mind that makes ...

I liked it. I liked how you set the scene and characterized. near the ened though, you began to be a little confusing. I'd love to read more!

I loved it! I would really like to read more! Gret charaterization and the first couple of lines really brought me in. Keep writing!