ibelieve_inme

thanks for the crit guys.....sorry about the glossary. I wrote this for a "end-of-school-extra-credit" thing, and this was the form we were suposed to write it in. I just copied ...

Temple as in body....duh. I liked it, none-the-less. Keep up the fresh writing...its much appreciated.

this is funny. Oh and I LOVE your book suggestion. It's a hilarious movie too, but the book is always better than the movie. I enjoyed reading this, i wasn't ...

I love this. It makes me shiver just thinking about it. Very personal.

I love your wording, and I understood all of it just fine. it all depends on the reader, really. Whether or not they connect. Good work, keep it up.

Your english isnt correct in alot of places, but I like it that way. It sounds more interesting if you read it outloud. It drew me in, and made me ...

i like this alot....we had health in the art room, and our art teacher likes nude was awkward. neways, nice writing, keep it up

thanks, ill try it

uh, thanks?

i know its not perfect - its far from that, obviously. I just like to stop when i like it, because i have a tendency of changing things too much, ...

Well maybe you could tell me how YOU would write it, because if its good enough to receive an award-twice, may I add-then Im not going to be too quick ...

Before you read the revised version, let me explain-somewhat-what this is about. Recently, A friend I knew, and was quite close to, died. Her boyfriend was the scariest, most manipulative, ...

Humorous...yet expressive nice

i just had a new baby, and i totally agree with this. Good job in capturing the reality.

Oh my goodness this is wonderful! I love your imagery and I understand it...which says something haha. Beautiful, by the way.