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Overall, I can say that this was very well written, and that you are very talented! One thing that does bother me though is the rhymes. They don't seem forced, ...

It's a good idea overall, but very unrealistic. For starters, I don't think anybody who knows that they're going to get into Harvard is just going to blow that opportunity ...

As people said, great imagery! The thing is, I had to read it a couple of times before I could really understand it. Sparkles blind as they reflect off the ...

There is an atheist in my class who once said " You're probably a Christian or Catholic, right?" It obviously made me laugh because I don't understand why he thought ...

I really loved this and there was some amazing imagery here. I like how it focused on race, sexuality, age, and gender. The whole purpose was amazing. It wouldn't surprise ...

Pretty, but very empty. It's lacking something. I would say a storyline. Although it's random, I think you should keep working on it! I got into it very quickly. The ...

I love the way when you laugh You're entire face lights up. This line just made me fall in love with the poem. Throughout my life, there has been two ...

Wow, I really love these! They are so creative and entertaining. I agree with misstoria and Gratziella, it would make a very funny TV show. At first I was bothered ...

So you seem like a very good writer, with A LOT of potential, but you defiantly need practice. Which isn't a bad thing. There's no such thing as a 'perfect ...

So, the whole idea of this is has potential, and I overall like it, but the rhymes seems a little too forced. Rhymes can often make a poem flow better, ...

This is an AMAZING poem, and I can't think of anything to critique. I loved the topic and I also loved the vibe. Anger. Confidence (Towards the end). Although there ...

Try to figure out what it's about! If you're just writing down words, then it isn't really a creative piece of art. I feel like this is about abuse, obviously. ...

People will still be offended by this poem, despite your intentions. I personally am not religious, so it didn't really offend me. Everybody is different, so we can all see ...

She nibbles on her lunch, But no one really notices. I just wanted to say that I love this line. It was so simple, yet I could see so much. ...

Some of the rhymes are defiantly forced here. I love the whole idea to the poem though. It has potential. Drugs are always something easy to write about. It's a ...