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  • Novel / Chapter » Dramatic, Realistic Re: The Secret

    Text: "She had always been made fun of in all of her old schools and she knew that after tonight’s party, she wouldn’t have to deal with it any longer. ...

    Wed Apr 04, 2012 4:31 am
  • Novel / Chapter » Teen Fiction, General Re: My Own Personal Hell-- Chapter 1

    Review: Start shouldn't be capitalized in the first sentence. Cooperate is one word its not co-operate. Also, the only other thing was a tape recorder, not is a tape recorder. ...

    Mon Jan 30, 2012 10:19 pm
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: Swing Chapter One

    Hey there! I'm Hockeyfan87 and I am here to review your work!(: I am in no way a professional so don't take anything I say to heart(: I was pushed ...

    Sat Jan 14, 2012 5:05 pm
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: A True Love Story

    Hey! I am Hockeyfan87 and I am here to review your story! Her gorges green eyes were now shut. gorgeous is spelled wrong "Emily? Well, lets face it, you were ...

    Fri Jan 13, 2012 4:58 am
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Tara's Story

    Well hey there! I'm HockeyFan87 and I'm here to review your story!(: I am no expert so don't take anything I say to heart. If I offend you by anything ...

    Mon Jan 02, 2012 12:13 am
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Ciel: Something of Fear

    There was once a girl named Ciel Courtois who was only distinguishable by the hat that she wore. In fact, I would have forgotten who she was, or at least ...

    Sun Jan 01, 2012 9:13 pm
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: To Be Cool.

    You must dress this way to be cool. You must have this much money to be cool. You must have this cell phone to be cool. You must say this ...

    Sun Jan 01, 2012 1:00 am
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Deleted

    Well hey there! I'm HockeyFan87 and I'm here to review your story!(: I am no expert so don't take anything I say to heart. If I offend you by anything ...

    Sun Jan 01, 2012 12:54 am
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: I shouldn't have let you go

    Well hey there! I'm HockeyFan87 and I'm here to review your story!(: I am no expert so don't take anything I say to heart. If I offend you by anything ...

    Sun Jan 01, 2012 12:44 am
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Being Alone

    Ok so I have to say that i really enjoyed this, but at the same time i kind of agree with Disenchanted. I was kind of confused throughout the story ...

    Sun Jan 01, 2012 12:10 am
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Peace!

    I knew it had to be done. comma instead of period But why did it have to be so difficult? It was dinnertime and dad had just turned off the ...

    Thu Dec 29, 2011 2:37 am
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: I Love You Preface

    Hey! I am HockeyFan87 and I'm here to review your story! I am not a pro so don't take what I say personal or to heart. Also, if you doubt ...

    Thu Dec 29, 2011 2:19 am
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: The Bet Chapter 1

    I really liked this! I agree with the other reviews, I couldn't tell if it was girl kissing girl or guy kissing girl, again, no problem either way, but I ...

    Sun Nov 13, 2011 7:46 pm
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: Love is Rich-Chapter 2

    Hi! I am Hockeyfan87 and I am here to edit your story! My comments will be in some sort of red color (: Marcus Carter was sitting in his room, ...

    Fri Aug 12, 2011 5:01 am
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: Broken Pieces. Prologue

    Hi! I am Hockeyfan87 and I am here to review! Since it is a shorter chapter I am just quoting it all! My comment will be in red. She walked ...

    Fri Aug 12, 2011 4:49 am


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