Published May 2, 2011
You must dress this way to be cool.
You must have this much money to be cool.
You must have this cell phone to be cool.
You must say this to be cool.
You must do this to be cool.
You must like these people to be cool.
You must party to be cool.
You must date these people to be cool.
You must sneak out to be cool.
You must hate these people to be cool.
You must put theses people down to be cool.
You must feel this way to be cool.
You must eat nothing to be cool.
You must do thing drug to be cool.
You must smoke to be cool.
You must drink and drive to be cool.
You must die young to be cool.
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Great poem! I just have one quick suggestion.
I think you should take this line out because you're going in to detail about what you have to do 'to be cool' anyway, so this line doesn't really have any significance.
I agree with all the other reviews, so I don't have much else to say. Anyway, great work!
-Anna
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This is a good write..It's true that people these days think they have to be like that to be 'cool'..
Hopefully this helped a little
Nice write! I like it
-qaralynn-
Hi there, egunn! This poem is totally COOL! XD You did a great job!
Just a thought.
That "this" I would write it in italics, letting know you're not talking about the poem. xD
Brilliant ending. xD
~Solvy <3
I loved this. It showed what it's really like today; it seems like people can't like different things to be cool. They all have to be alike. They all have to drink and smoke. There's no innocence to be cool.
Awesome poem.
I really like this poem. Truly amazing. My one point is: you start out all the same. Maybe that's my opinion but you could word the beginnings different so you have the same meaning yet different?
Either way it shows that there are many "ways" to being "cool" some not so kind and some that reflect the bad side of society such as driving and drinking. it reflects how kids sometimes think its "cool" to do those things when in all honesty its not. It shows the stereotypes of being cool...yet there are ways to being cool in your own way.
I really liked it and I can't wait for you to write more so I can read. This started out as a really good poem and I liked how it flowed. Just try and change the beginning a bit. If you need help just send a PM or post on my wall and I'll do my best to get back to you. Good luck and keep up the good work...I hope you receive many helpful reviews. Happy Writing and best of wishes.
Soulkana<3