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Re: Without Reason pt.1
Thanks for the critiques! why is it in romantic fiction??? Tee hee :P you'll see.
Mar 3, 2008 -
Re: In The Forests of the Night
Yes, that is true with the many powers for vampires, but you got to consider that Risika is a very powerful vampire. Not all vampires are so adept.
Jul 30, 2006 -
Re: My Sister's Keeper
I haven't read this but in my Writing class a girl brought in 'My Sister's Keeper' and read an excerpt. It sounded really good, I can't wait to read it ...
Jul 29, 2006 -
Re: OMGOT! The BESTTEST masterpeace wrotten!!
I love this! I can't believe how good a writer you are. Lovely is all I can say. It flowed so well. The imagry was amazing, I could see everything. ...
Mar 31, 2006 -
Re: is it ok?
I don't know much about critiquing lyrics but it seemed to me that yours had a little too many "OK";s in it. I hate it when a song repeats a ...
Mar 31, 2006 -
Re: capsized
This is fantastic, I really like this. It's so...rich and full. Very nice.
Mar 19, 2006 -
Re: Rose petals just as red when wet
Oh my god, this is awsome, frankly beutiful that's is all I can say. I really really really really really love this. I have no critque, you make me jealous ...
Mar 19, 2006 -
Re: Even I don't know what I am doing
Ok, this seems more like Randomness then actual story...the beginning is actually pretty good, you could make a story out of it. But when you said "Then Ella dies" I'm ...
Mar 12, 2006 -
Re: Angelic
Darn spell cheaker when it spelled ecstasy for me it capitilized it. Yeah, I know it it desearves a better ending, I'll try to help that.
Mar 12, 2006 -
Re: A Modern Beauty; Prologue
:P LOL I can't belive I missed that, please exuse me...
Mar 12, 2006 -
Re: A Pondering Moment
I don't know, the whole the 'way to a mans heart is through his stomach' seems over-used to me. But that's just me, theres nothing wrong with that stanza.
Mar 12, 2006 -
Re: Is
I absolutley love this, Sam. Although I think Shirly's charectar is a little cliche...ah, but who cares. This was awsome. Well done. *Golf Clap*
Mar 11, 2006 -
Re: a poem (warning, this piece has a lot of adult language)
What was the point of this poem? Its so cluttered with adult language that I can't see what its sopposed to be about. I can't even call this poetry really, ...
Sep 7, 2005 -
Re: A Chainlink Fence (working title)
Ick, I shouldn't have posted this. I'm still working on it and I'm going to cut out everything after her dream. I forgot to spell cheak it too, I was ...
Sep 3, 2005 -
Re: to Robert - why i'll never look at green grass again
Wow. I love all your poems but this was one of the best. I don't think it was really nessiacry to explain at the beginning but it helped. I can ...
Aug 31, 2005