hekategirl

I like this poem but the rythem was shacky and some of the rhymes were very forced. Reach out for me, I'll calling out to you I think you mean ...

Good emotional rant, but not much a poem for me. For some reason I didn't get the vision of you yelling at me like the others said they did. Although ...

I'm am not a Christian but I don't think it matters, this is an awsome poem. The words you used were great and for some reason I kind of liked ...

The re-edited one I like a alot better, but the first one I thought was still good. I agree with Galatea though and all her nitpicks, escpeshily the one wear ...

This poem has good potential but the rythem was bad so didn't flow at all (Which ruins it for me) I didn't really like the way you repeated "*Blank* is ...

You really has some good imagery here, like: "...sidestep girls clinging to you like a fourth-of-july popsicle stuck to your tongue..." And 'Mascara caked eyelashes' is great. But I'm not ...

OK, this is a great story, But CHANGE THE TITLE. When I first read the title I though of a toilet. I thought it was going to be some spoof ...

I have to agree with Chevy, I was falling aleep until the 5th stanza, and then after that it was boring again. The whole, 'make me a bubble so I ...

Its very so-so, it seemed to general. Theirs nothing unique about it. But the theme of 'You'll still make me smile' was good. But try to put in something that ...

Its good. But I'm not really sure how it can be bad. This seemes like the kind of thing you would put at the beginning of a story, you know? ...

There's not much I can say that hasn't already been said, but I don't think this here typo has been corrected though: "Counting from one to one hundred and back ...

I don't thing the weapons are really appropriate either. Werewolves can only be killed by shooting them through the heart with a silver bullet. A katana or a whip are ...

Wow, thats cool. I don't know if you wrote that on the comp or not but if you did thats cool that you wrote it one that had missing KEYS. ...

You need more backround, for one thing I'm not even sure where they are! its pretty ovious when the battle starts but you need to explain where Cathor is going, ...

TOO MANY DOTS!!! I can see that you wanted a long pause but thats way too many dots in my ohpinion. Their were a few formating problems in both sections ...