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Re: golden eyes
hey there... First of all... I think the story itself was good... But There are so many correct them... thein has mentioned them... Your descriptions were extremely weak though the ...
Mar 10, 2011 -
Re: My Heaven, My Sun
Hey... Your story was short and sweet... But some improvements are required... There should have been a little background of their feelings and probably a bit more description... Otherwise I ...
Mar 10, 2011 -
Re: He
Hey there... This is really sweet story... Something people end up loving :) You know him, I’m sure you do, or someone a lot like him. He’s that guy whose ...
Mar 9, 2011 -
Re: Coward
hey there... Your poem was what I call 'short and sweet'. The only thing is that you need to divide it into paragraphs...that would have made it smoother and there ...
Mar 9, 2011 -
Re: Once Upon a Happy Ending
hey there!! Welcome to YWS!!! The theme of your poem is very nice... The flow of it was smooth and perfect... What I loved about your poem was that as ...
Mar 9, 2011 -
Re: Heart of Ice
Hey there!!! Welcome to YWS!!! I liked your poem very much... I could feel the love radiating from the poem as I read it... It was very nicely written and ...
Mar 9, 2011 -
Re: Counting the Stars
W-O-W!!! Gosh I love your poem!!! Maybe because I'm a crack pot for love and tragedy...!!!:p But that doesn't change the beauty of your poem... The depth of emotion from ...
Mar 9, 2011 -
Re: Wishes
Okay... I gotta a lot to say to you, yeah I gotta lot to say. I noticed your poem was absolutely brilliant( I saw you're a Paramore fan too(Your signature)). ...
Mar 9, 2011 -
Re: As if I Never Existed
well well.... Your poems are just brilliant!!!:) I literally love reading them...!! And now I see that short poems are your kind..Nice kinds. This was also a good piece. And ...
Mar 9, 2011 -
Re: When The Tables Are Turned
Hey again!! I liked this piece a lot too!!!:) The scenes you have created are very nice and I like how the poem has ended. The explanation you have given ...
Mar 9, 2011 -
Re: Morgan's Lullaby
Hey Matt... Welcome to YWS!!! You'll love it here...:) I really liked your poem... The only thing which I felt wrong was the size... I would have liked it more ...
Mar 9, 2011 -
Re: Insult!
Hey there...!! first of all welcome to YWS!!! now for reviewing... I suppose The set up is in India. The language of the shopkeeper tipped me off... Your work needs ...
Mar 4, 2011 -
Re: Chapter One Edited and Added To
nicely done dude. what I really really loved were the dialogues. Very nice specially by Ashlyn... Anyone can make out the absolute hatred that lies their. And i also love ...
Mar 4, 2011 -
Re: Patience chapter 2
Hi again!!! This chapter was very nice too... Though honestly in the end I got slightly confused... The error I could make out were spelling and grammatical errors. You need ...
Mar 3, 2011 -
Re: Patience chapter 1
HI!! I liked the piece very much. A good beginning for, Hopefully, something even better. What caught my attention was the detailed description of things and people. The description was ...
Mar 3, 2011
