gyrfalcon

‘Look, I’m… I’m really sorry about all of this, Quennel.’ Pace popped his knuckles, looking at the hall floorboards. ‘I don’t understand the freaks. They’ve never been this… difficul

Yet again given a make-over as a result of your wonderful critiques! I'd really appreciate any extra feedback that previous editors could give me on the changes. Also, I'll be ...

Next chapter coming soon--sorry it's been so long! Oh, and by the way, thanks for the reviews. ;)

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:D Yay, I'm useful. One idea, as concerns: Quote: his brooding friend’s back WOW! “friend”? You sure the time is right for that word? I'm not sure! Its hard to ...

Hmph. :? I'm not sure what to do here! Your advice on showing what Boom was doing during the whole confrontation was really good--I've gone and given him a couple ...

Well, here I am again. Seriously, darling, you've got to post something for us ‘But such words! The rhythm, the onomattywotsit, the assythingy, the scheme of the overall underlying thingybob.’ ...

Sweat poured off his head as he ran, mouth open, panting from the physical exhaustion that was beginning to settle in . 1. Just off his head? 2. One generally ...

:Edited to include awesome critiques: Seriously, guys, what am I going to do with you? I'd really appreciate your opinion on how I did at slipping "Gypsie danger hints" into ...

Ah! *is swamped by absolutely awesome critiques!* I loooove you guys! *uber hugs* :D You have no idea how encouraging you've all been, I can't believe how many amazing editors ...

I realize that I seemed confused by everything, but then again I am a picky editor, and when I'm in editor mode I sometimes forget to be a good reader ...

(cont.) Don't forget, you asked for it! Now, forced by the rain to seek refuge in the sewers, he was going back home to where he’d left him. Question: Why ...

:Edited again: (to include even more wonderful critiques by all parties!)

Btw, are you going to put the whole thing up again? Is that allowed? I was worried about that myself, but I checked with Suzanne and she said to go ...

(continued) Gearson asked the question “so, who’s next on the list?” but was only disappointed. Okay, I’m not sure why Gearson was disappointed but it only confused me and doesn’t ...