guineapiggirl

Stella's covered it all, so I really don't have anything to add. If you want me to review some more of your work though, just ask :D

You did not beat me! YOU DID NOT! I wrote a review and then YWS went down when I clicked submit and so it got deleted! THAT STILL COUNTS AS ...

I actually preferred the one with the clarinet...

Yup. I'm pretty sure this is a stylistic choice, and personally, though I wouldn't write like this, I don't mind reading it. It's interesting. The fact that he hasn't capitalized ...

This is really nice. I don't really have anything to add but I really enjoyed the poem!

Thanks... Looked that up and it's very cool. Going to try and write one now...

Thanks! It wasn't harsh, it was really helpful. I'm doing an edit now and I'm changing a lot of what you've said! I don't really know what I was thinking ...

Thankyou! I'm going to start an edit once I've finished this next chapter!

Love how the title is longer than the story... So, I agree this should be extended. I think Paul should have to go on a quest to get the carrots... ...

Thanks- rather embarrassing that I left the 'destined soul' and 'a;gh;eohya;ohg;oiw' in! They were place fillers for when I found the right words... It looks like I pasted the old ...

Thanks- I think I might make it 'will never go'!

Thanks so much! Those were all really useful suggestions. The bat line was very helpful- I thought just 'down with the bats' too short but 'down with the rats and ...

Quite good... Hope this isn't too much of a personal experience? Sorry if it is... Can't really think of a lot of improvement. Start and ending especially nice. Well done, ...

From the reviews this sounds really good! Sad I didn't get to see it... Good luck with the reconstructing!

Firstly, grammar... Title: Although YOU'RE gone, you still haunt me... (3 dot dot dots works better) I think that what with the title saying he is gone, it would be ...