greenjay

Sweet! Goodjob again. Okay to corrections: He was about eighteen thousand arms lengths up when the tree looped around into a knot and shot out into several different branches. Eighteen ...

:D Two thumbs up on this one! Very good. I'm liking Dominic more and more, I like how you are developing his character. Also Whiperba has got to be one ...

??? A fight to the death??? Spookie and erie, both good things in this story. Anyway, once again good job! I don't think the end is too rushed, but the ...

Thumbs up once again! This story is starting to form. I'm starting to get a picture of what is going on. War, mercenaries, and of course dragons (what is fantasy ...

Goodjob!!!!!!! I like it! Why didn't I think of this? Anywho, I really like the idea of flying people. Provides for very cool and fun-to-write action, and there is no ...

Thumbs up! :D One thing. Khor must be like a superhero or something. I know most main characters can do really amazing things, but killing 60 or more 8ft+ shades, ...

Good. Another interesting and suspenseful mystery! I don't know what is going on so you'll have to write more :P. I don't really have much to say about it except ...

Good! So far (I read the prologue) it is slightly boring, but that can always change :wink:. I don't have much to say so good job and keep going! -The ...

Wow...You'd better finish this story or a lot of people will be mad at you, I didn't want to stop! First the whole idea of a warriors school (I think ...

Ooo! Ahh! Most interesting. This part wasn't quite as gripping as the first one, but was still very good. I don't see how the 1rst chapter fits with the prologue, ...

First thing, is there going to be more? If this is just the start of something then I say great! if there isn't going to be more then...meh as Snoink ...

SWEET! I started reading this on the home page and just had to click on it so that I could finish it. There is only one problem I see with ...

Very good! One quick thing is you might add some more conversation between Harestin and Covter. To me the time at the crow's house (or nest or whatever) seemed a ...

I don't have much to add, but i will say this. From the little i have seen of the plot it is really interesting, imaginative, and mysterious. What I mean ...

Sounds better now! I like its flow and style better. Just one thing: "In the time of your Ancestors, there was a brave tribe that were nomads, living by a ...