gamechanger10

only a few times did you lose the flow, but those were barely noticeable. my favorite was the very first stanza. it was so beautiful. this piece had great emotion ...

North, East, South, and West The wind shall come with it's best Blowing, gusting, shaking the trees Making people weak at their knees. Trees squeal at it's might The force ...

as Angel of Death said, the last stanza seemed to come too quickly--maybe thats because i was enjoying the poem--i don't know. you just seemed to jump from the death--which ...

this was--overall--a good piece. great for your first one. i'd suggest taking out the parenthesise in the last stanza. it was quite distracting. i too don't think that you need ...

very nice. i loved the repetition. i'm not entirely sure why, but i just did. a few moments seemed un-flowy, or whatever you want to call it. they just seemed ...

this was great for your first poem! the only thing i would say is that i couldn't quite catch on to your rhyme scheme. it seemed a bit scattered to ...

ok, so your obsessed with bananas, what else is new? alright, so in this poem, i couldn't really feel much of a flow through out the whole thing, that might ...

Sight whirls you might want to change this to light swirls or something like that, mainly because later you say black swirls. legs turn to jelly. Down the throat of ...

gabe!!! i agree with Vernon (the person above me) you did not address both sides. though you addressed your own okay, you failed to address your opposition...me. had you researched ...

this is kind of creepy, but, hey, thats okay, i'm used to creepy stuff... jk. this was as samsal said, sad... but dont think it needs to be longer. it ...

umm...gross... no, this was really good... i'd say i really enjoyed it, but that might come across as a little creepy... i might just be a sick person, but i ...

i agree 100 percent with andim...something something... certain lines really stuck out and were perfectly written, while others were only okay. i didn't actually recognize the take off of the ...

first, you need to review two other posts quick...you're supposed to do that before posting one of your own...if a mod catches you you'll have to review four....i'd suggest doing ...

I wasn’t borne in the city; I drew my first breath in what is now the scorched groove, i think you mean grove but what was then the most beautiful ...

first, chocoholic, he said that at the end of the day he was as happy and smiling as the sun he drew in art class, not that he was happy ...