futrauthr482

I like your poem. It is simple and sweet. The part at the end where you mention anatomy, seems jarring. It doesn't seem to fit with everything else. I like ...

Thank you so much! I didn't mean it to be bold, I copied and lasted it and that is how it turned out. I am glad you said I accurately ...

Thank you, again for your reviews. I hope you are enjoying my pieces. I am planning on doing a background story and I will think about altering the ending.

Thanks, I apologize for all of the spelling errors. I wrote this on a tablet and autocorrect was going CRAZY and the type was tiny I didn't see it. That ...

Thank you! Your review helped me tons. I wrote thi on a tablet an italicizing things was not an option so I apologize for the lack of clarity. And, that ...

Thank you! I just wanted it to have an all encompassing feeling of pain. I hope I did that, but you are right tht I could give it more direction. ...

I really enjoyed your piece. It was a very interesting idea. I would like to see a little more emotion throughout the entire piece. How did each character FEEL as ...

Let me know what you think!

Great flow and emotion. Try to develop the characters more. They all seem kind of flat and we don't know a lot about our main character. Some things that I ...

It was good. I could feel the drama. I would try to talk a little bit more about what the character is feeling. She just seems sort of numb. Unless ...

i agree last line ?