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Hi, The plot so far sounds interesting, good work on that! :smt023 But the grammatical stuff, as you've been told, needs work. Can't wait to read more! :)

Hi, This was really good! :) I like the fairy. :lol: It was very well-written, and I didn't find any mistakes.

I read it, it was so, so touching!! :D I think I'm most like Jo, with bits of Amy. :) Have you read Good Wives ?

Hi, I liked this very much too! The description was excellent, and the way you wrote was so...clear and interesting. :) Can't wait to see what happens. Great job!

Hi, I really liked this!! It was, as the others said, unique. You wrote it very well, I really felt Gen's pain. :( Awesome work!! :)

Hi, I liked the idea of this piece, but like everyone said, even though it could've been really dark and suspenseful, it wasn't. Just try to describe the scene a ...

Awww..c'mon..don't you think you guys are being a little hard on Paolini? Everyone KNOWS he's not even near being as awesome a writer as Tolkien, or CS Lewis. But cut ...

Hi, It was good, but I think it had more questions than answers. Maybe you could try giving a little more information on why she was sad. But avoid INFO-DUMPS. ...

Hi, I liked this story. :) The romance was so cute! :D But, I would have liked to know a little more about Yvette. A little description of physical features ...

Hi, She was shivering and frightened and wanted to go home. I don't know, in the style of the rest of the piece, this sounds out-of-place. It doesn't sound like ...

Small shadows of spiked leaves where cast over the mossy forest floor, and the signs of animal life could be detected through the small rustle of leaves, or the sharp ...

Hi, Your avatar is so cute!!! :D I knew that my parents did not like her, but that did not stop me from spending every [s]minutes[/s] with her. minute That's ...

Yay!!! The first chapter is up!!!! :D It was very well-written, I like what happened. But the pace could be slowed down, it went at a breakneck speed. Otherwise, very ...

Deathly Hallows rocks!!!!!!!!!!!!! Except for the [s]crappilogue[/s] epilogue. And the pairings, I hate Harry/Ginny. The Prince's Tale was such a sad chapter... :cry: poor Snape. I still like James/Li

Elayna carried on struggling nonetheless and tried to prise my hands apart. She almost succeeded but I held firmly and eventually she gave up and lay limp in my arms, ...