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I like your poem and I think the message of it is true. I do have one suggestion... Not the type that can have faith in your tongue. I think ...

I am sorry that you feel bad on Fathers day. I thought your rhyme scheme was very good. One part of the poem is kind of confusing because I cant ...

I love this poem. It is one of the most hilarious poems I have ever read on YWS. Your poem describes the state of mania in the main character really ...

Welcome to YWS I actually think that your poem is okay but I will give you a few suggestions... Im sick of these bitches I'm needs to be an apostrophe. ...

Yet another vampire melodrama,at this point it is becoming cliche . I agree with Jasmine bells that you wrote from a male point of view pretty well. I do have ...

I think you are good at writing non fiction. I know I suck at writing father, stop telling me I’m good. I strongly disagree with this statement because you are ...

I think your story is pretty good.I do have a couple of suggestions though He gestured to the busy street hundreds of feet below. Inside, he was beginning to get ...

Welcome to YWS Mackenzie. I like your poem. Goosebumps form on the arms and necks of the players They feel incredible, Fearless, And happy This is my favorite part of ...

I am sorry your horse coliced and died.I have horses myself so I know how hard losing one can be on a person. The poem sounds more like a column ...

This poem is very depressing.I have one suggestion. it whispers quietly in my ear, "It will be OK", it says, I think you should take out the "It says" because ...

I love your poem. There is no major changes you need to make. the soles of my twelve-dollar ‘poor people worker shoes’ from Wal-Mart, so affectionately deemed by my mother. ...

I kind of liked this poem even though some parts of it don't make sense to me. The sun has past left slammed the door wide This is confusing. What ...

Why do people end up in a wheelchair? Your first thought may be paralysis. yes, this is true. But a large range of conditions may result in mobility assistance, some ...

I think your poems are okay. I am going to review the first untilted poem. Untitled My body has become a breathing septic tank. I think you could have done ...

I think your poem is okay. I would like to point out some obvious errors watch people as I read and I see they're half aswleep, I think you mean ...