fallenangel1239

Okay, I have a suggestion. I do agree with thething912. It just seems like a rant from a horse. You say that it is supposed to be a man that ...

I really like this. While reading it I found that I can almost perfectly relate to whats being said through the poem. This brought back a lot of memories. Anyways. ...

I'm going to have to agree. I think what you are trying to say in this poem could be said a bit better. I was actually going to suggest the ...

Very nice. I really liked it. While reading it I could picture in my mind what was going on. I don't really have suggestions. I do think that it could ...

I must say. this poem was really good. I liked the flow and rhyming. I too noticed the change in rhyming structure, and have to agree that you should use ...

I do have to agree with what the others said. The constant of "one cannot" was a bit 'unsatisfying' to me. Of course, if it is a first poem then ...

okay...first of all, it was pretty good and I enjoyed reading it. I have some suggestions though. I think if you were to come up with a better title, it ...

This seems more like a vague outline of a good poem. It was a bit hard to follow and it didn't really flow well. I think you should use what ...

I am going to have to agree with the others. This piece is to much 'telling' and not enough 'showing'. I believe that if you put some work into it ...

I thought that the poems flowed well and the rhyming was pretty good. But I do have to agree, they are really short. You said that's 3 poems right? Well, ...

I am going to have to agree. Sometimes poems take time to write, or make shine. Although, I have written my share of poems that have been done in a ...

I think you did very well in writing this, but I do have to agree with Gahks. You need to work on your lineation a bit. It made it seem ...

Hey, good job with this poem. I really liked it. It's short and sweet, and still it has good imagery. Your word choice was quite acceptional as well. I love ...

That's a good poem. I've written something like that to get over a crush too, you're not alone on that one. :D I like the last two lines: Let me ...

This was very good. It conveys how love can be in some people in a different way than you would normally find. I thought that it was very well written. ...