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Hey, I saw you on the Welcome Board, so I figured I'll reivew one of your stories. I enjoyed the set up and fairy tale feel of the story, although ...

Okay, as the person before me said, the first thing that caught my eye are the grammar and spelling errors. Although as far as writing goes, grammar and spelling isn't ...

Okay, firstly about titles...they're not that important, firstly, and secondly, it's just whatever theme you think runs through your novel the most, or just a concept or thought you want ...

Okay, I like the idea behind this. As for writing from a male POV, it's not too difficult - I mean, there are masculine women and feminine men. I find ...

Hallo. I like the description of the room, firstly. I like the set up and the revelation of what they're actually doing - I think it's quite clever, and it ...

I enjoyed this scene fragment. It would be lovely if you could give us some earlier background to the scene - we have no idea what the era is, or ...

I like the rhyme scheme, but it might serve the overall dark tone of your narrative better if you use alternating rhymes...the quickness of the rhymes makes it take on ...

I love this. Possibly because I love the dark, but I love this. The only thing I can suggest is deepening the descriptions and expanding the story slightly, but the ...

Firstly, me being me, I must hug you. So *hug* Okay. Story wise, this is brilliant. The attention given to detail in this is incredible, and as always, its best ...

In general, I like this story. The prose is fairly smooth, the ideas solid. I think the ending epilogue is relatively unnecesary, and takes away from the depth of the ...

I like the use of the song as a link throughout the whole story. I also enjoy the elements of mystery - how we don't quite all the way know ...

Hello, Okay, firstly, I love the idea behind this. However, it may work a little bit better if you don't have the revelation in a big letter form...maybe have her ...