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yeah, well, like i said in chapter two...i'm revising already, so i'll keep all that in mind, including the names. I got Asriel because i just asked a random person ...

>.> i reinforce the previous statements. i do like your idea, however. ^_^ but one thing....try and separate your paragraphs....it's just easier to read that way. but, good job!! i ...

too late. already smashed the computer!!! 8) nah, i don't really take these things personally. they help, so i can't. :D but thanks anyway...

sorry. :oops: i didn't realize i had done that. maybe it was just so infused into me...>.> i do love the book!! i'm still trying to fill out her parent's ...

ah..poetry wars!! it is a nice concept...but like others have said, you might want to work on it a bit. stretch it out some, it's a bit drab. but cool!! ...

wow...i like the description. it seems to go a little fast for me, but that just may be me. i also agree with others' statements. i like your style. good ...

*blinks* wow... that was amazing. i love your use of adjectives....extremely original. wow.

sorry....>.> this: Werewolves also have a higher body temperature, about one hundred none degrees, so don’t; expect us to pop up in any hospital-we heal pretty quickly anywise. was supposed ...

pie-yeah. tha't skinda my problem. it's in first person narrative, and i'm trying to tell it as she would. as my creative writing teacher ut it, i need to show ...

yeah...summy-ish...I'm still in a kinda rough-draft stage. but thanks!! and, yes. werewolves....and vampires....they come soon enough.

much thanks!! i'll see to it that i'll break it up. i tried it on paper,and it does look better. maybe i was just a afraid of messing it up??