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Your rhyme scheme is flawless and complex, without feeling forced. Brava. Second in my greatest flaws Is my defense's tearing claws. Sharper than serraated saws. A lack of grace when ...

besides march being capitalized, I really liked this poem. It was very tell-y, but I found it oddly fitting. It felt like the descent of a teenager. And the staircase ...

It took a second to get the last line. But i realized they welcomed each other while thinking naught of each other... nice. I like it, and I agree a ...

from the endings of the poem, it seems to have a pretty good rhyme scheme. It's kind of odd hoe you wrote a poem in a different language about writing ...

trapping a man within their depths to forever have hi heart captivated by their depths I don't like the repetition here. Besides that and the typoes in this piece, it ...

Hey Day dream, your comment made me happy. :) Don't know what reviews you read of mine but I'm glad they pleased you. Your idea is fabulous. Usually when people ...

know one has ever been true. no one until I am 6ft.beneath the ground six feet Besides that, it was a pretty good piece. Your rhyming scheme was nice, and ...

I take it your a mother? I wish my mom wrote me poetry. This was so sweet, when it started I thought "another love poem? Please don't let someone break ...

The un-read books begin to swell, the pages rot and start to smell. I’m sorry but this course just ain’t romancing me getting its kicks from kicking the sense out ...

You've left me all alone I don't even know why you should take out this line; it's a little overused and the last sentence doesn't flow as well. Also, you ...

I agree with the person above about changing around the structure of the stanzas so they flow nicer. Also, I love the vertical stanza at the end. It was an ...

I say eliminate the beginning and elaborate the end. She stood mid-embrace broken and hurt. Tears streaming down her face, hugging those who’d heard. They took him away, and she ...

Prepare your arms for many embrace, This should probably be "many an embrace" to keep your rhyming scheme intact; because normally you would right this as many embraces. Besides that, ...

I thought this was an amazing poem, especially for your first one. Wow :D Great job! I do agree with person above, though. You didn't get to examining the elements ...

I definitely get the idea you're going for, and the emotions, but like you said above yourself, it's a little ambiguous. Which isn't a bad thing, but the story of ...