empressoftheuniverse

I like the structure of this poem, the short, edgy lines give it a bit of a rougher, more emotional feel. And the language is masterfully simplistic. . That It’ll ...

I found this poem quaint and beautiful. I liked the words that you used in your rhyme Our words stuttered madly, we both choked on tears It felt more like ...

I agree with Durrance, however I think this piece would be nicer if you hinted more at emotions in this stanza I am from a world of rejection Of pain, ...

I actually thought this poem was quite brilliant. Sad and depressing, yes, but utterly wonderful besides that. The streaks on my cheeks No one can see I wear no mascara ...

But we became fools This feels like an uninspired rhyme. Try something else here. Wild has came with the tile Teenager tile- title unless I misunderstood the sentence. Besides that, ...

five months we shared But it never felt Like you really cared Every time you held Me in your arms I couldn’t see pass All your charm this moved so ...

It was really, really depressing. With not all that much insight. I understand that you want a creative release but you know what goes hand-in-hand with creativity? Individuality, and though ...

When I first read it, I admit that I thought it an imaginative love story; and therefore pretty decent. When I read your post about it being about anorexia nervosa, ...

I hate to be the weird one and disagree with everyone above me but.. I think the length is fine. It felt like the poem was over and there was ...

I also liked the way it spelled out a name, but I'm a sucker for that vertical-line poetry (has a specific name but I've forgotten) It is a beautiful birthday ...

I loved this piece. I loved the It is a heavenly sin. maybe this should be stuffed with heavanly sin. Because it feels a little strange right now. Besides that, ...

Okay, here we go. But you’re not here, and you’re not there. I think the but can be removed from the sentence, because the last line started with Yet and ...

I agree about everyone above; it seems like a laundry list of things that you wish you get done, and it feels scattered. I would say pick one or two ...

Sorry this is late. Hope your meeting went well. An angel perhaps, Here to save me from the deep crevice that is my abode? I think the line after this, ...

Ls like crying to others this should be is. I liked the imagery in this, very vivid and compelling. Because your a dream I never had This line is too ...