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The imagery was excellent and the different repetition within the poem was properly used to stress the poem. Nice job.

You definitely need to add things into this.

I know this is no help at all but... This is awesome. You deserve something...

This is really beautiful.. I'm not playing the sympathy card either... this honestly is really awesome. I especially like the second part of it. Very nice.

I've read a couple of your poems and I noticed that you like to give lots of imagery.. however I don't think it's all necessary. I think you stretched this ...

Description was very good in this. I thought the third stanza was a bit over the top, but that's just me.

I can't really imagine this as a song... It's a bit too sarcastic, I guess, for songs... The 'misfire!' repetition kind of made the song seem jolly, even though it's ...

A release, maybe? I know how you feel. It's too short for me to really comment on, though.

This didn't seem to have much depth in it. You seemed to be describing something, but not with things that you felt, so it seemed sort of distant.

I don't know... It was kind of a metaphor. One of those cliche love poems where the bird is the person that didn't love back. And then 'setting the bird ...

That was really powerful and sad... but nicely written.

This was so different and original... I really enjoyed this.

The structure was a little weird... but anyway, I liked the way you wrote it. The parentheses really added to it all. It confused me a bit until I reminded ...

Wow... That really made me think. The imagery was great and even made me a bit uneasy. I love the last three lines, too... Nice job.

Eh.. Sorry, not critique. It was really great...