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The rhyme was forced at some parts. This line was a bit weird: "Love grows old with time and sand," Time and sand? I know it was meant to be ...

Maybe I'm just really tired right now, maybe I'm just stupid. I didn't really get it. Each line had good description but they didn't seem to connect. Once you personally ...

I hate people like you... You always write such good poems...

I didn't get: "There won't be some people that people won't see." What does that mean? It was really confusing me. I really liked the last two lines though.

It seems like the beginning of some witch chant in a little kids' story...

It... was... angry...

It was allright. It's better than a lot of the rap nowadays, anyway. The lyrics were good. I'm not a huge fan of rap, but this was okay. It's spelled ...

It wasn't**

It was okay. It was fabulously awesome, but it was allright.

I don't like how you just said "there is one doll" and "there is another doll" and then you directly stated what they stood for. You need to be more ...

I really liked it.

The rhyme bothers me.

It seems kind of cheesy.