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elwarren

  • Poetry » General, General Re: The Wall

    Hi! For a first poem, this is a fantastic first attempt. I like that you kept to the rhyme scheme throughout, which also Mirrors the regularity and ridged ness of ...

    Aug 16, 2015
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Culture Re: From The Top Rope!

    I really love this poem, I like the way that you haven't explicitly mentioned that it is about wrestling (I'm guessing it is lol) My favourite line is "His demons ...

    Aug 6, 2015
  • Poetry » General, Culture Re: My Safe Place

    Hi! this is a really promising bit of writing! Just a bit of constructive criticism, I would capitalize the start of every line, and maybe refrain from the over use ...

    Aug 6, 2015
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Teen Fiction Re: A Bridge of Chains- Part 1

    Wow! what an incredible start to a story! The only thing I would say is perhaps you could mention a little more about the time period/city as this is a ...

    Aug 5, 2015
  • Poetry » Realistic, Other Re: Lies.

    Wow! I really love this poem! Very emotional and raw! My favourite line in this has to be "Dancing with the ugly truth" the only thing I would say is, ...

    Aug 5, 2015
  • Poetry » Realistic, Other Re: Speech

    I really like this poem :) very relatable to anyone who gets anxious about public speaking, so well done with that! I really like the repetition of the first and ...

    Aug 5, 2015
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Blind

    I really like this poem! well done! I especially like the computer virus imagery, as for me it conjures up anxiety in the pit of my stomach, like when you ...

    Aug 5, 2015
  • Poetry » Realistic, Romantic Re: Best Friends Forever

    Hiya, I really love this poem! It is very true, and raw. I love the way "Friend" or "friendship" is so often repeated, it really drives the point of the ...

    Aug 5, 2015


If it wasn't for poetry, I couldn't express myself.
— Rosendorn