elephantwalrus

Hi there! Welcome to YWS! I'm River, and I would be honored to be your first reviewer today! You use fantastic, fanciful language in this poem. Also, your images are ...

Hi there! At first, I thought this was going to be another angst-ridden, cynical poem about all that's wrong with the world, but in the end, I found that I ...

Hi there! There are so many different ways you could take this start, and I'm interested to see what you do with it. I'd like to praise you for the ...

Hi there! This poem definitely made me laugh. I wrote a song with similar sentiments not long ago :). Thank you for the permission to be nit-picky...don't mind if I ...

Hi there, You have so many different images in here! Poetry lives off of imagery, so good job! My only complaint about the imagery is that you use "like" too ...

Hi there! This could definitely be a prologue, if it precedes another story and the information in it is vital to understanding the story line. However, I would make it ...

Hi there! I really liked the second half of this poem. Honestly, I don't think you need all the questions at the beginning. They're not very poetic, but as soon ...

Hi there!! Welcome to YWS! As far as the competition goes, I haven't heard of any specific one, but there's always the Literary Journal that you can submit to! Here's ...

Hi there! The thing that I think of when I read this piece is "I know the feeling." The wishes you express are universal, so in my review, I aim ...

Hi there, While reading through your thoughts in this poem, I definitely could relate to what you said. This idea is something a lot of people can relate to, so ...

Hi there! I was going to go all-out with a grammar analysis, but since you already turned it in, I'll refrain :). Even if I had gone all-out, there isn't ...

Hi there, I really enjoyed this poem as a whole, and recurring image of gold. It was very well put-together, so thank you for that. I only have a couple ...

Hi there! This is an interesting poem. Is it about a cactus? That's my best guess, anyway. Your descriptions are colorful and fantastic, but the ambiguity makes it a bit ...

Hi there, I love the characters of this story. Do you read any Tamora Pierce? Your style reminds me of hers a lot. Now, to start at the beginning: I ...

Hi there! This was a very touching piece. You've got a knack for descriptive scenes and clever metaphors, which made this an entertaining read. I especially loved the whole "toothpaste ...