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Wow!! That was sooo good! The imagery was amazing and the metaphors and such were really different and unique! The first stanza was definately my favorite :D This was a ...

I did like it! It was really quite good and somewhat unique. The only part I didn't like (I don't know why though... and it's only opinion) was "also wish,". ...

Huh. This is kind of strange, but strange in a good way. Like Passion said, it's simple, but it makes you wonder deeply about such an unrecognized object. The poem ...

That's really good!! Sort of sad and depressing, but good! My only nitpick is this: The street, the house and everything else, Could not be identified I would just change ...

This is one of those things that made me wanna shout "LOL LOL LOL" out loud... (yeah...I do that sometimes, especially when I'm around people who find it irritating) I ...

hahahaha!! This is amazing!! I laughed my head off through the whole thing! That was pure awesomeness!! Just one quick question though... Isn't it actually "Love Story" by Taylor Swift, ...

That forgettable face, blending in with the crowd, the one that rarely speaks never boisterous, never loud That girl whose name you can't quite place the one whose hand is ...

Comments, suggestions, corrections and all of that stuff in lovely red! :lol: SEAN KERR 26th June 12:17 AM I was busy examining Amanda’s body while my team searched for a ...

You know the drill soldier! Corrections, comments&suggestion in red! Let's go! .... Anywho... Chapter II – Detour “...mitri.” Came the soft whisper; a silver bell’s chime. Loved this! “Dmitr

Comments, suggestions and corrections in red! ;) Chapter One - Sanctuary The breeze swept his unruly hair away from his face and back again, making the rough strands brush harshly ...

Corrections, comments and suggestions in red. ;) Dear Daddy, I miss you. You can probably tell since I pray to you every night. Okay, we're not a Christian family, but ...

change 'at' to 'in' the beginning of June, and I was lying on my bed, my iPod earphones blasting loud music into my ears. The afternoon sun was gleaming through ...

Comments, corrections suggestions in red...but you knew that ;) Chapter One The small room is filled with many clothes, costumes, hats, and jewelry. In one corner sits a bureau with ...

Corrections, suggestions and comments in red. ;) Prologue I stood in the small, grassy meadow. Tiny orange flowers softly illuminated my vision. The bubbling of a nearby creek filled my ...

Corrections, suggestions and comments are all in red. :) The next morning, after Rebecca introduced me to her class, the two Hatstat sisters seemed in a incredible mood. While we ...