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She could remember the dandelions , Sweet and yellow , I moved the comma to replace the period so that the sentence would continue more fluidly. :) And she had ...

Heya Coral. :) I think I'll try and take this in pieces, as each line is pretty much filled to the brim with detail. we’re sprawled out on the dirty ...

Poetry written on the spot is the best kind. The fact that you wrote this in a car (rather than the content) reminds me of a song called "Drive," by ...

I personally like little things such as "continental continent," though I can see how others may think it's a bit redundant. It's ultimately your choice, either way. Overall, I really, ...

This poem has a quick pace - I really like the way it plays out with a very natural flow to it. Seeing as this type of poetry isn't quite ...

I just hit backspace, and my whole review was deleted. fapsekrtjas;dfklj'asd. sigh. Anyway. Hiya, again. Seeing that sir Kafka has already done some line-picking, I ended up just forming an ...

Change my shadow, my shapeshifting thing I like shapeshifting, but you should use a stronger adjective in place of "thing" twist me and bloat me and make me cry, for ...

Haha. Corasaurus. Let's get crackin'. First off, I think this poem is a major improvement compared to the original piece. I'm curious as to what the time interval was between ...

Great piece you've got, here! I love the way the tension builds throughout the piece - your imagery's great. One thing I will suggest is to try to me more ...

Great piece. I often feel this when I'm talking with my friends... most times they never notice when something's wrong, and when they do, they make a joke about it. ...

Spread like a star, his hands are big Thick and strong, Compared to the line before and the ones that follow these two, your wording in these lines isn't very ...

Well. It appears that somebody else has beat me to a thorough review.. so instead of going into detail, I'll just suggest some things that stuck out most and leave ...

Your name rolls off my tongue, Gliding gracefully into the air Like a flower unfurling Its petals. Your dark hair is woven Into tightly spun Curls and waves , moving ...

You’re tracing thoughts into the lines of my palms semicolon...maybe? soft, gentle, HARD , digging your nails into the wrinkled This criticism is a bit one-sided, because I personally just ...

I won't even bother denying the fact that you got me to smile from beginning to end, and I even laughed in some parts. :P This is so awesome. I ...