*shyly looks around the poetry section*
It's like moving to a new country, I swear...
Ay-nee-way, I've been challenged to try this very frightening (I think) part of literature known as Poetry. You may or may not have heard of it.. Go easy on me. 
A First Attempt
Here I sit with pen in hand
To write a poem oh-so grand.
I sing and snooze,
I mull and muse,
Yet, alone, no thought can stand.
I once thought poetry was fun,
Or so said my father’s son.
The blank paper I see
Keeps glaring at me—
I’ll never get this poem done.
For insight, I observe my room—
Dolls, books, a flower in bloom.
No thought comes to mind—
My insight must be blind—
For I’m left with no poem, but gloom.
I moan and groan and pull my hair,
For my brother lied—oh, how’d he dare!
No poem I’d write,
No matter the night;
I’ll never write again, I swear.
I dotted my i’s and crossed my t’s.
Don’t ask me to write another, please.
My rhythm’s off
And so I scoff—
Poetry I’d write forever, I tease.
I throw my pen atop the table
To read this poem (if I was able).
I cringe, I cry,
Yet deep inside,
My talent was there, a bit unstable.
I share my work with friends galore
For all their comments, I implore.
They read and were pleased
With this opportunity I seized;
I was anxious to write some more.
So here I sit with pen in hand
To write a poem even more grand.
I sing and snooze,
I mull and muse
Until a poem, alone, could stand.
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I feel you (nods). Writing poetry is easy? I'd love to fling water on the idiot who said that to me a while ago. Composing prose is hard enough, but when you need to add rhythm, patterned structures, rhymes, imagery, etc...It's even harder than taking the SAT.
Still, I'm glad you've managed to write a good poem despite your frustration. Good job^^
(PS, I'm talking to the you of 2008, not the present you. I'm sure you've improved vastly since then^^)
-Hello
I know this is a pretty old poem, and I don't know if you'll even read this because of that but, this was really relatable! It should be called the struggles of writer's block! I get these feelings and actions all the time when writing. I enjoy the part where you said you looked around your room, it just adds character to the piece. Also it gives a glimpse on how fudging ANNOYING siblings can be. The poem had so much enthusiasm and heart.Keep writing!
-The Orange potato
Awwww! This was utterly adorable! My first poem read by you and I'm already hooked. Great job!
JABBERRRRRRRR!
Well hi! I'm not sure you'll ever get this comment because its the last of many. I know you wrote this poem years ago... but thats just what I do. I dig up ancient pieces of work and comment... just because I can!
I especially liked this poem. For a first posted poem its really great! The rhyming scheme worked and everything was very well laid out. It was a fun read... and is better than any poem I've ever written. It's a great talent to be able to use rhyming so well... it just doesn't seem to work for me.
I extremely enjoyed this!
Deanie x
I won't even bother denying the fact that you got me to smile from beginning to end, and I even laughed in some parts.
This is so awesome. I remember when I first started writing poetry, this is exactly how I felt too. The only difference is that you're skilled enough to actually write it all down. Great poem, definitely enjoyed this. 
Keep it up!
Hey, Jabber! Nice poem! It felt like I was reading Robert Frost! I liked how you were writing a poem about how you didn't know what to write about. You have TALENT! *sings Broadway*
Cute cute cute, Jabber! Nice and light, not like some poetry (I'm such a hypocrite, just posted like the saddest poem I've written... well, sad for me...). I really enjoyed it, and it leaves me with a strong sense of satisfaction. Nice work!
I've been reading you work Jabber, I have to say it's quite fun.
I love your poems!!
KEEP WRITING!!!!
Wow Jab! This poem is great. I don't have really anything else to say but it was excellent. Good Job. Keep Up The Good Work!!
SimonCowellLuver
That brought out the blood sweat and tears that comes with writing. I can see that you are channeling some angst
. Nice Job.
And you said this was a like a new country to you? This was brilliant! You should really keep writing poems!
*applause*
-kittykat
You are brilliant! And this was your first poem? I wish my first poem was half as good as this! I love this kind of poetry.
*applause*
Keep writing poetry!
*adna*
Wow... *moan*... you got a featured work on your first try.
Amazing.
I don't have any edits... this was really good.
It was a little bit quirky, which is why it isn't exactly my kind of poem (I prefer writing more serious, realistic, problematic poems... with a couple more comedic poems). But it's really good.
I... don't... believe... this! XD You put a bunch of "experienced" poets to shame here. (Aka, me... I've written quite a few poems, but they aren't that good.)
Keep writing!
Teh Wozzinator
I liked it. It sounds like me and poetry. Not exactly my preferred style of writing...
But you did a fantastic job here. You had a great rhythm going and your rhymes were really great. I second Snoink in that you don't have to rhyme all the time in poetry, but your rhymes were great. Often they feel forced or awkward, but you picked some excellent words there...
Fantastic job, Jabbers! You put my first attempts to shame!
*applause*
~GryphonFledgling
Jabs, this is ultra cute!
"a bit unstable" doesn't seem to flow with this stanza. I thought it might be a meter problem but after a few go overs, the meter works out... So I'm not sure what is causing it. Try reading it out loud. This might be just be, but it doesn't flow right."a flower to bloom" is really strange, but you could easily change it to "a flower in bloom" and no meter is harmed, and it makes more sense!
For a first try, this was real cute! I prefer deeper poems, but not everything needs to be deep to be good. Snoink has a point: you don't always have to rhyme. But if you're rhyming in a way like this, where it is cute and doesn't make me want to pull out my hair, then it's wonderful. Please, continue to write poetry. ^_^ I want to see what beautiful combinations of words you can write!
Hahaha, slightly repetitious, but it's cute! And I like the metering. But just in case, I just want to note that you don't have to rhyme everything. That's a misconception I had when I first came into poetry, but it's wrong.
Even so, nice stuff!
I really really love this, it was.... well it was brilliant. Keep up the good work. That's all I can say.
Hya Jabs! What's up? Diving into poetry is really scary. Especially with Brad lurking around...
May I suggest a comma tonight?
I don't know if I'm reading this right, but maybe change it to, "With this opportunity I seized."?
I love commas. You don't... hehe
Wow! Jabber! That was brilliant! I mean, for your first poem! I always feel like that... but it never comes out right. XD Great job! I've always tried to write a poem... about writing a poem. And now you've succeeded! Congrats!
-Jared
whoah this poem is soooooooo good jabb
I love it!!
O.O Jabby! This is freaking brilliant! I must say, if this poem says what you feel about poetry now, you are utterly and completely wrong about yourself, because I swear, this is one of the best poems I have ever read on this site!! Not just this site... EVER!! The rhyme and meter is spot on. I have no complaints what-so-ever. Keep trying poetry! Please?! Do it for me! Do it for you!
~Yoyo