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  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Free from the Puppet Masters

    Heh. As Snoink said, this was a bit dull for poetry. I wouldn't necessarily make it "fun" to read.. but make sure the overall tone of the poem matches the ...

    Mar 28, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: i am a rifle

    First thing I noticed was that you don't really follow a specific rhythm. While some poets take syllable counts and perfect rhymes rather seriously when it comes to reviewing poetry, ...

    Mar 27, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Just a Dream

    Heya - I'm Ear, and I'll be your reviewer for this evening. I'll start off with the positives. In light of the fact that I'm heavily leaning toward majoring in ...

    Mar 27, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Perseverance Never Lies

    Hi, Matt. This is going to be a somewhat short review, but I thought I'd stop by real quick and share a few thoughts. Let's start off with your strong ...

    Mar 22, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Traces

    Persaaayyyy. It feels as if it's been forever since I've reviewed something by you. Why would you allow me to be so lazy for so long? Goodness. Alrighty - let's ...

    Mar 20, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Three women and a blank page

    A couple suggestions: 1) It seems as if I've been saying this a lot today, but once more won't hurt anything. :P Try to use correct punctuation and grammar. While, ...

    Mar 19, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Pretty Girls Do Ugly Things

    Hokay, so. I wouldn't consider this as a "getting even" review (because that just makes it sound like I didn't want to review this - believe me, I do), but ...

    Mar 19, 2011
  • Script » General, General Re: The Bench

    Haha.. I'll be honest now and just say that I have no idea how to review this, especially since I've never really written something like it. I'll just put my ...

    Mar 19, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Light and dark.

    Contrast light when darkness falls. The sun rest s upon the sea, Hills come? alive upon lights true desire ; Darken ed rays falls upon the sun , creating an ...

    Mar 18, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: The Fall

    Alrighty. I have no idea why, but this reminded me of Samson, by Regina Spektor. .....anyway. This is good. Not your best, but it's good. You had a few single-liners ...

    Mar 18, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Plums

    I don't believe I've ever reviewed anything by you before. So. Hiya. First off, I admire anyone who can or even just attempts to incorporate sciences into poetry. This poem ...

    Mar 15, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Unfinished Apology

    Agree with Coral. For me it's not so much confusing (I'm perfectly aware with the fact that I don't understand the poem, but I'm not confused.. if that makes sense ...

    Mar 1, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: My Crush Ate My Homework

    When I was in grade eight, I was taking an advanced language arts class. The only problem with the class was that the teacher was a complete idiot... so much ...

    Feb 28, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Anorexic One

    First off, nice piece. Not that I like the subject, but I'm always interested in seeing writers try to tackle it. Usually not a big fan of rhyming poetry because ...

    Feb 20, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Haunted

    I think this piece holds some potential, given a good polish. The first thing I noticed right off the bat was the way you started with "I" quite frequently. It'd ...

    Feb 19, 2011


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