dragonrider

I REEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAALLLLLLLLLLLLYYYYYYYYYYYYYY liked it. Crafted well. Writen VERY well! But some sentences were awkward like this one Not a thing was v

Sounds brilliant!!!! :evil: Good review by the way. Oh and it's a big long for a review though. Imagine fitting all that on the back cover. You should also separate ...

It was really short and straight-forward. You should lengthen it a few more paragraphs longer. I didn't like the sentences At long last, he moved his lips closer to mine ...

You're sentences were all over the place. You repeated the same words over and over. And you didn't quite feel the emotion. I mean, you weren't quite in depth. I ...

Sweethearts, I have to say, I was not hooked. There was nothing significantly interesting about it. It seemed a little "neutral". I didn't get a passion, angry, sad, or really ...

I didn't like the "10 plus 2" part. Despite the crazy marry and die together thing it was sweet. That was a little weird. Also, I think it would have ...

You had sentences all over the place and several of them were . . . boring :(( and confusing. Use interesting adjectives that keep you hooked and thrilled and make ...

I don't think it's a fully formed thought in your head. It was confusing. I don't know if it's about a guy with a girlfriend/wife or about his daughter or ...

I really enjoyed it, but you're going to want to post new words. You repeated love, sorrow, fairest, they're lovely words, but a bit overused. It had an interesting flow ...

A good subject to write about, but sorrry, I got pretty bored. I know what you were saying, but it was hard to follow, the sentences were choppy and a ...

You need to spice things up or people will lose interest. The story itself is interesting, but some lines are a little cliche and "unclear" and a little "plain". However, ...

I liked how the words flowed, especially at the ending. However, I would have liked if you kept the guy evil personally. But, you could have "flavored it up". Like ...

This poem was respectable. I liked how you transitioned through the seasons. Thumbs up. However, I think you could have been more thorough with each season. It was a bit ...

Nice. I found it to be very interesting. It was written realistically--jealousy, the hatred for the heart break-e, but the longing to be loved. Also, despite the bitterness for the ...

The first story I read is about an insane guy who kills himself. This is just like me. Okay, this is my review: I enjoyed it. It had the perfect ...