dragonlover92

This was awesome! First I thought that u wanted some guidance but than you seemed to guide yourself rate to were you were speaking the words that God put on ...

Its good but your 2nd line in the 2nd para. doesn't make much sense.

So far so good, but seems that you got cut off or that u left something out. Need some more in it.

It kind of confused me, but it makes me think of how the mind can play tricks on you and can make you think you see something were there is ...

I like it, but i had to re-read it to understand what you were trying to get across. To me it was a little confusing, but still good.

This is really good to me. Makes me think about what path i'm on and makes me want to be more adventitious in my own life. Thumbs up!

Its good, I like how u repeat the beginning at the end. It gave me a feel of i was in a dream and that i was in the clouds. ...

I like it. Gave me many different feelings through out it.

thanks, if you have a suggestion that could help i would love to hear it. I am a new writer and am trying to learn.