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Re: Blank 2
Knight Dragon, here to review! Technical: "Great, the last hit was." This makes absolutely no sense at all. Could you please explain a little bit more? "And when I do... ...
Oct 4, 2013 -
Re: Technology; Molding the Future
Knight Dragon, here to review! First off, welcome to YWS! Now, on to the review. Technical: "Did you ever imagine what would be our world without technology?" is better written: ...
Oct 4, 2013 -
Re: The Key of Autus, chapters 7-8
Knight Dragon, here to review! Technical: Well, you should already know about your formatting. Quotes need to start new lines unless it's the same speaker. And I don't know if ...
Oct 4, 2013 -
Re: Too demanding?!
Knight Dragon, here to review! Technical: "If it bothers,eat a ham." First, there should be a space after that comma. Second, please put a "you" after "bothers". Since this is ...
Oct 4, 2013 -
Re: They'll Never Know Any Hope
Knight Dragon, here to review! First off, let me say that the moment I saw "Existentialism", I was uber-excited to come review. That's one of my favorite philosophies to study. ...
Oct 4, 2013 -
Re: Friends Reunited
Knight Dragon, here to review! Technical: Are you going for a specific shape with this poem? Or is it just supposed to be as it is? Also, are you going ...
Oct 4, 2013 -
Re: Proving at Present the Countless Use of Technology
Knight Dragon, here to review as requested! First off, welcome to YWS! Now, for the review. "This is a line of Bill Gates from the website of great technology quotes ...
Oct 4, 2013 -
Re: The Cycle
Knight Dragon, here to review! Technical: "But not like that." If you remove "that", then it flows a little better. "Open mouths, Closed minds." I get you're going for the ...
Oct 4, 2013 -
Re: What Life Means To Me?
Knight Dragon, here to review! Oi, that font hurts my eyes. And all caps makes it really hard to focus on what you're saying. It's just ONE BIG BOLDED ESSAY ...
Oct 3, 2013 -
Re: “TECHNOLOGY – A ‘PRO’ at the Society”
Knight Dragon, here to review! First off, welcome to YWS! Now for the review. Technical: "Have you realized how it affects so much in people’s lives may it be good ...
Oct 3, 2013 -
Re: Rebuilding Thunder Chapter 2
Knight Dragon, here to review! Yay!!! More story! But there are vile grammar demons in its midst. Technical: "He handed back the notebook and started off with a sprint towards ...
Oct 3, 2013 -
Re: Paxton Chapter Four
Knight Dragon, here to review! Technical: "The girls huddled behind the door as Teri and John left." I'm sorry, but did I miss something? Is there more than one door ...
Oct 2, 2013 -
Re: Return Of The Unwanted Dead. Chapter 8.
Knight Dragon, here to review your final chapter. Well, it's been a long road. Let's see how it ends. Technical: "Vaaassaacarraaaaaaa" is not how you write a stammer. "Va...Va...Vascara" is ...
Oct 2, 2013 -
Re: Technology at Its Sweetest Consequence
Knight Dragon, here for the requested review! First off, welcome to YWS!! Now, for the review... Technical: "But, have you ever wondered about all its harm to people?" could be ...
Oct 2, 2013 -
Re: Technology on the Other Side
Knight Dragon, here to review! First off, welcome to YWS! Okay, there are seriously a ton of these tech essays. Am I missing something? We've had this mass immigration of ...
Oct 2, 2013