Javier, Raph Lauren M.Final Term
Comski1BS-ECE T1B
“Technology; Molding the Future”
Did you ever imagine what would be our world without technology? Like before when there are no machineries? vehicles? and gadgets? Would the world will be easier to live with these technology? Well, others visualize it that they can’t live without it, simply, because technology changes the way of our living from the past to the present. In our contemporary world we can see technology everywhere. People are used to it and sometimes became dependent to it. It is because the truth is that technology is accessible in all aspect in our life. In that, technology became conducive to humankind for it give many benefits. Thus, technology helped to enhance different aspects of life like in the field of transportation, communication and labor.
One of the advantages of technology is in the field of transportation. Before, when technology is not yet improved, people have difficulties in travelling in different continents of the world. Like in the expedition of Magellan, he uses galleons in his journey to different parts of the world that gives them tragedy and it takes years in travelling. But now in our modern world today, the advancement of technology produces cars, airplanes, trains and other transportation vehicles that makes travel time faster and make us comfortable. One of the best examples of advancement in technology is the bullet train in Japan travelling 320 km/h that benefits the passenger by consuming less travel time and convenient in trip. There are opinions that technology destroys our nature because of the transportation vehicles that causes pollution. But because of elevation in technology, there are transportation vehicle that are friendly to nature like solar cars. It only shows that the improvement of technology in transportation benefit a lot to the world. According to Leyvobich(2010),harnessing these advancements is likely to become a key part of remaining competitive in the transportation sector in the future.
Another advantage of technology is in the field of communication. Communication today is barely recognizable when compared to communication of the past (Nelson, 2012). Communication at the present time is convenient and faster. The invention of smart phones and laptops makes the communication process easier and faster. Online communication can bring families and friends together across distances. We can now keep in touch to our loved ones from different part of the world in just a second through social networking sites. These social networking sites do not only used to communicate but also exploited to be updated in the society and in the whole world. Through also these social networking sites we are able to utter our ideas and opinions that make us united to one. Everyone can be in sync to the society where they belong. People can instantly pass important information through televisions and internet during emergencies and disasters. We can wrap up that technology abet a lot in the field of communication.
Last, technology has an advantage in the field of labor. Today, large scale of industries and companies are in lined with the used of modern technology. It is an advantage in the scale production because it is faster and produces fewer errors. . According to Ramey(2013) technology has changed the way we work and it has brought some fan at work, it reduces on human errors which can be caused by too much work or stress. Technology can be used to automate various tasks at work. The technology is also used to develop their own creativity and innovation in the ideas they created. Accountant before are manually doing their job but because of modern technology they are just encoding the transaction and the machine automatically check the errors. It flaunt that technology is convenient to use in their jobs. It creates mobility that they can perform their job from anywhere at any time. “Other benefits of using this convenient form of technology include the supervised access within company, security clearance level, increased productivity, quick relay of information, capitalizes in secure investsments, job tracking and planning(Taylor,2008). It is the high technology that makes the business to be in order and give bigger revenues. Because of the features of the modern technologies it is not impossible to create a product that will benefit the world.
Truly, technology has a great impact in society for it changes the way of our living from the past to the present and maybe to the future. Maybe it is a fact that the generations today are dependent to the technology for it greatly benefited everyone in our society. Moreover it has greatly advantage in different aspects of life like in the field of transportation, communication and labor. In transportation it is faster and comfortable in travelling; in communication able to communicate to the world; and in the labor that develop their innovation and creativity. It exhibits a huge contribution to the world. I can say that without these it is difficult to live without it for it became a part in our life. We can see it everywhere and they used it in their everyday life. And they are continuing using it for it benefits them. We should always think our action when we are using technology for it is innovated for a purpose.
References:
Leybovich,(2010). Tech Advances Improving Transportation Efficiency. Retrieved from http://news.thomasnet.com/IMT/2010/07/15/technology-advances-improveing-transportation-efficiency/
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is better written: "Have you ever imagined what our world would be like without technology?"First off, welcome to YWS! Now, on to the review.
Technical:
Those first two question marks should be commas.
Better: "Well, others believe that they can't live without it simply because technology has changed the way we live our lives."
Better: "This is due to the fact that technology is accessible in all aspects of our lives." or "This is because technology...all aspects of our lives."
There's a lot more, but that should give you a good idea of where to start. But a big thing you do throughout here is "the way of our living", which is better written "the way we live".
Hope this helps!
Hey there! I'm Onyx and I will be reviewing your article today! Sorry it was a later review than expected!
Great job over all! I liked it a lot, just the underlining kind of threw me off.
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Just from glancing at it, why do you have underlined sentences? If you don't mind sending me a message why, I would really appreciate it.
So, just being a little picky here. I would take out "like" at the beginning of your next sentence and I would take out the "?" between "Machinery" "vehicles" and "gadgets" only because they can be put into one big sentence. Like... "Machinery or vehicles or gadgets?" Which lets you use a rhetorical technique. Making your essay more effective.
Make sure you use quotations when you are taking words from someone. Also there should be a space between "," and "harnessing" just a little thing I saw, nothing big.
Over all
Keep on writing and doing a wonderful job! I can't wait to read some more of your work! If you have any questions why I had said something or what I changed, feel free to send me a message! If you need anything else to be reviewed, post it up on my wall and I will get to it as soon as I can.
~Onyx
i like this because it is interesting to read
Great work! I think the objective in writing this articles is achieved and the topics are well explained. Keep it up!
This article is impressive! Keep up the good work!
Nice organization of ideas. Relevant quotation and great conclusion
All in all, it was a fascinating essay. Go Raff! 
Good topic choice. You presented informative information in your essay. Although there are some miss typed words, your essay is still good.
Nice organization of ideas. Relevant quotation and great conclusion
All in all, it was a fascinating essay. Go Raff! 
Nice title I agree with it.
The citation was very well elaborated.
Over all, it was a nice and very interesting to read especially nowadays.
Nice organization of ideas. Relevant quotation and great conclusion
All in all, it was a fascinating essay. Go Raff! 
Very well said
I love it. You've made an excellent essay. Job well done.
Hi Raph,DK here with review.I see that the deadline is tomorrow,so I think I need to help by giving review here
I like your essay here,no comment on the topic you want to point up here,just a few comments on writing style.
It's more pleasing if you write like this.'Like before when there are no machineries , vehicles, and gadgets? Would the world will be easier to live with these technology?'
1.Grammar.
Try: "there is transportation"
The count (singular, plural) of your determiner and auxiliary verb need to agree. Here they don't. Use a different determiner or change your auxiliary verb.
2.Mistype.
" capitalizes in secure investsments*,"-->investments
Good essay,good luck !
Thanks a lot
very well said. nice essay
NICE ONE . keep it up bro
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You have a point on your essay. Keep up the good work!
NICE ONE.
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Thanks a lot for your comments
It was a brilliant essay. Words are created with full knowledge and sense. You have clearly stated the advantages technology possess. Keep up the good work, Raph.
Your essay was brilliant. It is stated there the advantages that technology has. What a wonderful essay. It is full of knowledge and sense. And your conclusion in the last part was clearly delivered. Keep up the good work, Raph.
Very well said. Nice article huh, keep up the good work.
Nice essay.
Good Job! Keep it up!
Nice! The organization of idea is great and I love the conclusion. Keep up the good work bro!
I like this article! Keep up the good work!
I like the conclusion you've made .. Good Job ! .
Nice! Very well said, keep up the good work
This article is a must read. Very interesting topic and a very interesting article to read. Keep it up.
Reading this article made me realize how helpful the technology is. Now that technology is all around us, I can conclude that technology will have no limit for its improvement.
This is a nice piece of work! Your points are very well taken. Keep it up!
It is good that you stated some of the advantages of technology. It really does take part in molding the future as your title says.
This is a great essay! Your points are well taken. Keep it up!
Nice work Mr. Javier! I like how you give emphasis on the important details in your paragraph. Keep it up
good essay. technology obviously has advantages and some are clearly stated here.
Your essay is so thumbs up! Keep it up!
Nice intoduction, bro; it hooked me. Good organization of thoughts as well as the choice of words. One thing lang, dude, there are some comma splices. You can also put transitional devices, as a suggestion.
Nice one!
Very well said, Mr. Javier. Keep up the good work.
Nice one. I like your essay. Keep up the good work.