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"asked the girl whose name was boy" Right off the bat this line sounds awkward. Unless you're going for the awkward wording of this piece, maybe try saying something like: ...

Hello there Killer! Dogs here with your review today! First if I may say, WELCOME TO YWS! I hope you enjoy your time here, if you need any help or ...

Hello there Life! Dogs here with your review. I saw you giving out some quality reviews to some of the works recently, so I thought I'd hit you up with ...

"Oaken bookshelves lined a section of wall, filled with dusty books" Double "book" in the same sentence, try cutting one out or replacing it. I think that you should maybe ...

Hello there Ben! We're just going to dive straight into the hard core reviewing here. Ok, to start things off, as excellent as your dialogue is in your writing, you ...

Hello once again! I'm back for round two and eager to see what you've got to throw at me this time! Let's snap to it now shall we? "With blurred ...

Well my goodness gracious! Never before have I been offered four whole reviews. Why the situation is just so deliciously tempting, how could I possibly refuse! (Sorry I've been watching ...

Hello there Damon! Dogs here with your review today. First, If I may say WELCOME TO YWS! I hope you enjoy your time here, and if you need anything: A ...

"Fin stood in the forest with his wooden bow in his shaking hand" Hello there Winter! Dogs here with your review. Ok, quick note that I'll be rather persistent on... ...

Hello there Dasia! Dogs here with your review. Ok, to start things off I really like the idea of this piece and using death as a play fellow. That theme ...

Hello there Wolf! Dogs here with your review. Okey dokey, to start things off I like this piece, you took a boring and overused topic and put your own spin ...

Hello there Alexis! Dogs here with your review. Firstly I love your avi, it makes me think of your poem. You have great imagery and excellent comparissons in this poem ...

"in my own dark little corner Away from everyone, away from the world" Howdy, Dogs here with your review. Nice opening to this piece, although becauseh this is a narrative ...

Hello there Louis! Dogs here with your review. I appologize in advance for any spelling errors I have in this review, my spell check isn't working for some reason. Anywho, ...

"from what this world has revealed to me I no more think of" Howdy, Dogs here with your review. Minor note here, but you need a comma after "me" to ...