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This may be kind of short because your writing is developing so nicely that I don't have any criticisms for you! Your vocabulary and grammar seem impeccable and I just ...

Hey there! I loved the Blues Brothers movie - which I kind of think you're referencing in this, so kudos on having a good taste. And your profile picture is ...

Hello there! I love music references, so kudos on all of these! This poem is really interesting, even if it touches on a ton of different ideas. The imagery was ...

This review isn't going to be super long, but I hope I can help you either way. To start off, I really like this! The message is really sweet and ...

Hello there on this marvelous Review Day! I'm going to give you a few suggestions about this chapter of yours! First off, you have a few typos in this, such ...

Hello there on this wonderful Review Day! See, now this is a much more comprensible section to be able to read and understand. All you have to do is review ...

Hello on this marvelous Review Day! First off, congrats on being able to write this much. Wow. I'm afraid I don't have the time to read all of this, but ...

Hello on this wonderful Review Day! I really like this story a lot so far. You did a good job on integrating Ari's past and making it sound more genuine ...

Hey there! Happy Review Day! I'll be trying to give you some comments that refer to what you want to know - about plot and all that. To start off, ...

Hey there on this wonderful Review Day! This is really good! You have a good sense of pace, and pretty good descriptions in this. There are a couple of mistakes ...

First off, I'd love to know how you thought of creating this, because this is rather hilarious. At first, I was thrown way off, but then I read "Satire," and ...

Well, I'm not exactly sure if this is allowed, but I will say this - maybe you should mark this as an "Other" work? I don't really think think that ...

Aw. *hugs* I've never had a pet before, so I don't know how you must feel, but I will say that I'm sorry for your loss. I kind of feel ...

Wow. This is really well-written! Although I'm not really affiliated with a church, I love being able to learn more about religious practices, and you described everything really well! I ...

Hey there! I know we're on different Review Teams, but I'll try to give you good pointers in this review, either way. Happy Review Day and good luck! To start ...