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This was pretty good, sorry it took so long for me to read this. Anyway seriously about the start just seems very off-putting and cliché. You should maybe try put ...

This was interesting, but two things put me off is the rhyming and the constant repetition of only. Other than than the rhyming issue and other one. I reckon this ...

Aww god this is so sweet, i rarely read romantic fiction, but title caught my eye god this is so sweet. I love how they encounter, I hope to see ...

Oooh this is creepy almost surreal-like. Two things don't space out the text that way. You could put it all in italics be good way to show it's a dream. ...

The Power of Five - Anthony Horowitz Mortal Engines - Philip Reeve Remember Me Saga - Christopher Pike Harry Potter and the Goblet of Fire - J.K Rowling The View ...

Great as per usual Emily. Well I didn't notice any major errors I'll look at it again. Yeh you keep mentioning he's so weak, but how is it he runs ...

This was good only problem was beginning was too long winded, it didn't drag me in. Try make a start that drags people in. Also sometime simple words work just ...

Can a heart be more Than the shell that others see? Can a spirit transcend Its own mortality? Is a mind worth less Than the face it hides behind? Can ...

Again I say like with one before you concentrate on repetition too much. These poems if less repeative be good, just try a poem like less repetition and maybe more ...

This poem would of been good if it hadn't been so repeative. I had difficulty at finishing this, because of repeating of my heart non-stop. I wouldn't say scrap it ...

Okay I noticed few things. “Go to your bad, Scribe Should be "Go to your bed, Scribe. A hickey is a slang term for love bite and sort of modern ...

Okay interesting, good name choice. Except in my story that name is for a villain. Well lets get down to nitty gritty. spiel. From what I can guess this is ...

Now I love the message of this poem, but please split it into stanza so it's easier to read. Great message wish i could say more. Just keep fighting good ...

the broken hearted and the setting sun all relate and become as one life was perfect it was just you and me waiting for nothing holding hands Dying to get ...

Verse 1 Unblimished, untouched Still in her perfect form. She dreams of the day When someone will say, “You’re mine to hold.” But everyone passes her by Never noticing her ...