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Hey there, You're planning to use only one of the two prologues, right? I'd suggest using the first one, for it is much stronger than the second. Or you could ...

Hey Jen !! Another excellent piece of writing ! :D *is proud of you* I've done the review in attachment form as a habit, and because I'm too lazy to ...

Be warned, I've never critiqued poetry before :D but especially for you, here it is !! :wink: Hope it helps, though I'm a disaster at writing poetry, so feel free ...

Hey Teddy I enjoyed reading this, it was just as fun to read as the other two parts. Tere are some things I'm being nitpicky about, which is character development, ...

Awesome! Hee hee This was really really good, Jen. It's heartbreaking, the way Matty doesn't dare reach out for the salt, and the way their mom is hurt by their ...

Heya This was very well-written, and really, really heartbreaking. You've excellently displayed the emotions of the girl, and how she feels about her parents. You had me hooked throughout the ...

Hey there I actually enjoyed this part more than the first, there's something about the way it's written that leads me to assume you've put more time and effort into ...

Heya !! Welcome to the YWS, dear :) *Huggles* I enjoyed your story a lot, and am definetely going to go read the next part the second I'm done with ...

Hey GML :) I enjoyed reading that. I felt bad for the MC when the man turned out to be such a grumpy old guy! Anyhoo, here's the comments :D ...

Hey Holly, I really liked this story!! Its so full of emotion, you really feel for the characters ! Great job, seriously. I hope my review is useful to you! ...

Hey there GML As I said in chat, here's the review :D That story was amazing! It was just. .. wow! I hope the world never ends up like that, ...

Hey Holly, As promised in chat, here's the first review. I really enjoyed reading that, and am definetly going to go review the next chapters (once I've reviewed some work ...

Hey Saint I loved that chapter! The first one is awesome, and this one exceeds it, so you're at the level of absolute awesomeness right now :wink: PM me when ...

Hey Teddy This story was as good as the Séance ! I really enjoyed reading them and hope you'll be writing more soon! It was well-written, with good description and ...

Hey there, Teddy :wink: I enjoyed the story, it was really cool! I really liked the topic, with the Ouija board and the mystery. It was awesome. I hope my ...