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Thanks. All errors have been fixed. I've made a slight change to chapter 2 to cover the changes already called on by Snoink and somewhat in conflict to Vernon's chat ...

I touched upon that back in the first posting, didn't I? :) It's not that names are weird, its the structure you chose for them that didn't make sense as ...

The entire dialog.

Its not that bad, but it is a bit of a forceful and tight hug. Perhaps I actually intended it to be the way it was written? :P Not to ...

You used the scimitar on the goblins. :P Its your story, but I usually home in on what nature or style the writer uses even from the weapons they choose ...

Oh Tempest...I don't know if that was a side shot at people trying to help here, but Snoink's advice was solid, and I mean REALLY solid. If you broke down ...

You can say different, but they way it was handled was exactly like any generic super soldier, but I swear I just had to watch the trailer again, even the ...

Please post it here in the first post and for the rest of them. It doesn't seem to be a large file for any of them. :/ For attachments they ...

Edit 4 times? No lol not this part. I added new stuff in cause Snoink found it wasn't going anywhere. The dress is semi-important as it shows class and how ...

Is this a joke? If not this horrible work belongs in another forum, this is poetry, not fiction.

Good point! You'll see in the next bit about that, if I can post this up instead of FEC. Sae is really neuter until it takes on a human form, ...

Not bad but i agree with kittykat on this one try to work on your grammar. That is one big problem in writing. Trust me I know. Hope this helps! ...

A much better chapter, while still short it is getting interesting with Lights dreams that haunt him, something we never seen or heard about during the manga. Keep up the ...

Ah fixed it up. You'll see for that in the next bit in fact. Pencharmer is expecting it around her neck still...but they both think it broke. Pencharmer in his ...

The second part was not read from the book, it was Constance's reply referring to Augustus Venaldi, the lead researcher into many unusual and magical events. You'll learn more about ...