deavarna_satina

I disagree with Aedomir. I think think that you should be able to give your vampires any qualities that you like. Folklore aren't rules and I find that many vampire ...

OverEasy has done the nitpicking here, so I wont bore you with revisiting. I like your idea here. And you have used some good descriptions. A vampire romance *sigh*. I'm ...

First of all I would like to say that you have caught my attention. This is an interesting idea that you have here and I would love to read more! ...

It's an interesting idea and I would like to see you develop it more. I find writing about animals can be a little dodgy and I agree with Azila when ...

You have an interesting plot here. Your use of words were good, though a few punctuation errors. I am rather intrigued by this box you speak of and the story ...

These are some powerful lyrics. I don't normally haunt the lyrics catagory, but these really struck a chord. It would be awsome to put them to music! And being hearing ...

Wow... this is really captivating. You have written it very well and the emotions can be felt through the whole piece. It's so brave of you to write about something ...

I do think you have something here. It seems almost criminal to end it there. I think you should let John have his revenge after his life and love were ...

I really loved this piece. Your descriptions were beautiful. They twisted and spiralled, pirouetting like ballerinas, slender and curving. Loved this metaphor. Very appropriate, but not the first thin

Hmm... good. I liked it. Overall I think that your descriptions were well done and your story caught me from the beginning. I'm a sucker for a good vampire romance ...

Oh no, did you have to stop there? I was completely absorbed! I can see that you are getting into the meat of the story now and I am liking ...

I think you have something here. You caught me with your description of the shadowy stranger; I would really like to know more about him. I liked the preface. With ...

Very good. Bravo. I relly enjoy your writing style. I like Anica's character; her take on her invisability is well-written. Loved the first few paragraphs about the feild and the ...

Wow, that was quite excellent. I really did enjoy it. I like the outlook Sandly Limerick has on the war and what has become of London. You have portrayed his ...

Beginning, very good. A delicious tale of forbidden love is what it says to me. yummy... though I have been wrong before, so my apologies if I'm off the mark. ...