davidechoe13

cool, i wanna see more!!!

Sorry for some of the errors in my review my keyboard is messed up. so sorry and keep up the good work

P.s. If it's not too much trouble and you don't mind i have a piece im gonna post in an hour or so of this message, but i have a ...

I would DEFINITELY suggest that you invest in a shorter piece.

ooooooooooooooookaaaaaaayy weeeird lol

at least its not about death :) smiley still guards!!!

Hey it has helped actually showing what i need to keep up and stuff thanks for reading them and im actually working on the next chapter and it'll be up ...

Thanks

pretty cool, sounds very interesting though why is it rated 16 or whatever?

it was good i honestly just needed a few points and i just pointed out something or it wouldn't really be a review :)

okay a good piece i honestly haven't read the others so i dont know whats going on, so i noticed you sorta switched from past to present every now and ...

Absolutely love it really good not really rhymey but then again i guess it has to be. the picture goes with it really well the best part is that it's ...

another really good chapter and in all honesty i haven't reviewed anything cuz there's nothing to read but this is good and thanks for the points. i have made a ...

Just so you know this IS an action adventure novel. i just haven't come to that part of the story i will try and do my best of getting action ...

I think everyone else covered the editing so i'll just say really good :)