david2oo8

Part 2 James spent the next few days in a daze, he was unable to comprehend exactly what had happened. He and a few of his friends had discussed this ...

Thanks for that. I did realise that it would be a love it or hate it storyline, it was just a story i thought could be good and its not ...

Ok so i guess its a no for this story then lol.

Bar means except So that line would read except the odd look or ..... Im guessing its the fact i write in British English thats causing the problems with things ...

This was meant to be the last one but it does continue Only thing stopping at the moment is the fact i have no points left and will need to ...

Way too short in my opinion. It was okay but could have been so much better if it was expanded again, as i already said. I liked it for what ...

I really enjoyed this story and it is very intriguing. Cant wait for the next part of the story. :)

Thanks for that :D

I liked but I have to ask: since your name is david2oo8 are you david in the story? No i couldnt think of a name so i just put my ...

Thanks and i will review the next chapter before posting it And about the "I" thing all the time i do agree its a bit repetitive. I think i will ...

As was said im not a fan of reading lyrics but this was very well done I dont know what kind of tune you were thinking of in your head ...

Thanks for the review Yes i do agree its a bit predictable but it does get a little more unpredictable later on (As the complete story is already written)

Thanks I blame my spell check for those lol

Thanks for the comments and yes i am gay I will try and describe the setting more, but for me when writing it has always come secondary to the characters ...

Thanks for the review In later chapters i put periods in but not always so i will put them in before i post the other chapters Thanks again