darthmaul1001

OK thanks for the help Guys (:

OK so i really liked this, it had a really good rhythm when u read it. i also really liked they way its kinda of listing yet you have to ...

Thanks you guys this helped alot lol i wrote this at two in the morning so i wasnt expecting it to be perfect. ill work on it some more then ...

OOhh if you wouldnt mind could you go under Lyrical Peotry and read my newest post called The Eyes of an Angel? i f you could i would be verry ...

lol me too im mostly happ that u decided to help tho its greatly appreiated (:

OMFG YESS YOU SHOULD KEEP WRITING!!! very very very good. the only thing i would change is i would put an elipsis after the word Tears ( both times so ...

sorry i was in a rush im gonna fix it lol , it should say soul not should

Thanks a bunch guys (: im going to be posting a new one that i wrote last night call The Eyes of an Angel, please chack it out (:

OMG thanks a BUNCH!!! Holds was just a typo but ill make sure to fix up the other stuff!!1 ive been on sooo many diferent websites to get people to ...