dante93

By the way if you do not understand it, then you should read Dante's Inferno. You guys also need to read deeper. If you did not understand it, there is ...

You hated it. thank you. it is supposed to be sad. and its not emo. I don't get where you guys get that retarded idea from. There is no I ...

I love the contrast in the poem. The tone so dark, the imagery showing how destructive lies become even when one tries to speak truth. Good job and keep writing ...

I like the poem, but the stanzas are a bit hard to focus on.I would suggest making the long lines a bit shorter. It would create a few more stanzas, ...

thanks everyone. i will take that into consideration and see about revising the top soon.

Thanks to both of you. I have never been big on rhyming in my own work. I just write what makes sense. Again than you for your comments.

I intended to make this poem have a broken feeling, because a fate worse than death is being broken, and cursed to live an eternity with that feeling.

I love this poem. It is vengeful, yet it has a sad tone to me. I think this rivals some of the better poems that I have written, well done.

thanks. bit the poem has to have a serious tone throughout, and if not the full impact is not felt. Thanks for your comment, I appreciate it. Also these cannot ...

thank you again. that is exactly it. I still have to find the other two poems tow put with this one. I would like to clarify, any perceived eradic shift ...

Thanks to both of you for commenting. I was referencing the character, and this was a jumbled poem I was trying. I keep trying to use different styles and so ...

Ha the sad thing is this is not a "start" This was written on a whim,and I think it is good. i guess it does not really matter to you ...

thank you again.

Thanks for the comment. I try to keep some line between utter torture and the light. I have to write something not so dark every once in a while or ...

I actually made the poem internal on purpose. It is internal because that is part of my style. Thanks for the suggestion, but i do read a lot of poetry.